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Reviewer: Mykleavens (talk) 13:28, 29 May 2011 (UTC)
1. "In the past the Outer Hebrides were often referred to as the Long Isle" — should "Long Isle" be plural?
2. Prehistory — citation for the year 6500BC? Note: I realise some citations cover more than one sentence or even a whole paragraph but if in doubt I will include a point in this list.
3. Citation re Ketill Flatnose?
4. Norwegian control — "various islands petty kingdoms" needs to be revised for clarity: is it missing an apostrophe?
5. Scottish control — direct citations needed for quotation in this sentence: In 1598, King James VI authorised some "Gentleman Adventurers" from Fife to civilise the "most barbarous Isle of Lewis".
6. Citation needed for "the colonists were driven out by local forces commanded by Murdoch and Neil MacLeod".
7. Clarity needed re "The Seaforth's royalist inclinations". Is the Seaforth singular or plural? Misplaced apostrophe?
8. Please provide specific links for both Jacobite risings in this phrase: "in the "15" and again in the 1745 rising".
9. "The UK government's strategy". Not sure about the use of "UK" here and suggest "British government" would be more correct for that period. What do you think?
10. Need a citation for "English-speaking landlords whose main concern was the revenues..."
11. I have a general comment about syntax as I have made numerous copyedits whilst reading and these have often seemed to be around the use of commas and semi-colons. For example, an extensive list of clauses like "Roads and quays were built..." needs semi-colons. Please watch use of "and" after a comma.
12. Citation needed for "large scale emigration became endemic".
13. Does the 1886 Crofters' Act citation cover the sentence about the "Battle of the Braes"?
14. Modern economy. Need to clarify "throughout the late 19th and 20th centuries" which is ambiguous. Please provide a more specific period: e.g. "from the late 19th century to the middle of the 20th century".
15. The word "nonetheless" is used twice in one small section. Please use an alternative. Same applies to overuse of "recent".
16. Re Mendelssohn, you should say he "composed" the overture rather than wrote it. Ditto re Bantock.
17. Citation(s) needed for association with islands of Ian Anderson & co.
18. Citations needed re Compton Mackenzie and George Orwell. Also re Enya's song.
19. Language. Citation needed for arrival and use of Scottish Gaelic from Ireland.
20. Language. Citation(s) needed for prevalence of Old Norse and the obliteration of earlier place names.
21. Language. Citation needed re Sabhal Mòr Ostaig based on Skye and Islay.
22. Repeated links. Needs to be addressed throughout. I have noticed repeat links of, for example, Western Isles and Scotland.
23. Please clarify "under colonised".
24. Etymology. Citation needed for Ptolemy.
25. Presumably the hedgehog cull brought forth increased usage of articulated lorries?
26. Benbecula image should be moved right as it has created imbalance and whitespace.
27. The Caledonian MacBrayne image at the top has created a stack, given that the map is the primary image and should stay put, so please relocate the ship image.
First pass completed - will return asap for the rest. Many thanks for this comprehensive review. Ben MacDui 20:18, 30 May 2011 (UTC)
As a guide to the article's current state, ahead of a formal review against the GA criteria, it rates as follows against standard B-class criteria:
1. It is suitably referenced and all major points have appropriate inline citations.
2. It reasonably covers the topic and does not contain major omissions or inaccuracies.
3. It has a defined structure, including a lead section and one or more sections of content.
4. It is free from major grammatical errors.
5. It contains appropriate supporting materials, such as an infobox, images or diagrams.
6. It is fully and correctly categorised and carries all appropriate templates.
Numerous citations are still required and so I think the article should currently be rated C-class according to assessment criteria. I need to perform a detailed review to decide if the scope is adequate, though my first impression is that it is quite comprehensive. I need to think about categories and templates but, again, there is nothing obviously missing.
The lead and structure are certainly there but I must compare the lead with the text for GA purposes. Although there are no major problems with grammar and spelling, you need to ensure that a full copyedit is done before nomination to weed out the minor errors and ambiguities: my copyedit has been more extensive than I would have expected.
The images, especially the maps, are excellent and there are only a couple of positioning aspects to consider.
I'm placing the review on hold for the time being as there are a lot of points above but I'm confident that, once these are addressed, this article will eventually reach GA. I'll watch it and help where I can. --Mykleavens (talk) 16:00, 30 May 2011 (UTC)
well-written:
factually accurate and verifiable:
broad in its coverage:
neutral –
stable –
illustrated, if possible, by images:
Thank you for addressing the points I raised. You are right that one of them was a rhetorical question! I could see on first reading that this is not going to be merely a good article but potentially an excellent article that will one day be featured; and so I decided to mark it strictly especially re the citations as this will help it towards FA status. It is a very interesting piece. I've been to Skye so have had a good flavour of the place and you have put forward some fascinating information, especially around the turbulent history. Well done and good luck when you inevitably nominate it for a feature. --Mykleavens (talk) 14:56, 1 June 2011 (UTC)