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Rupert Downes

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Promoted --Eurocopter (talk) 10:32, 3 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Nominator(s): Hawkeye7 (talk)
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Another article on a an Australian Army general. Also another one on a doctor. Hawkeye7 (talk) 12:19, 24 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

  • I'd recommend changing all the mentions of the Great War to First World War, I think that's generally more accepted.
    • Done.
  • "With so many people and horses, sanitation was a challenge, a discipline in this area was initially slack, as it had been with disastrous results at Gallipoli." Huh? Please rephrase that.
    • Done.
  • "Downes repeatedly clashed with the British medical officers of the Egyptian Expeditionary Force (EEF), whose attitudes Downes regarded as endangering his troops,[21] especially the DMS EEF, Colonel A. E. C. Keble.[22]" Please rephrase, it implies that the attitudes endangered Col. Keble.
    • Done.
  • "Atr the same time," An extraneous r, perhaps?
    • Corrected.
  • Can you explain the bit about his appointment that didn't happen because Blamy had already appointed someone else? How would that happen, were two people in charge of it and acting without communicating? That confuses me.

Please fix these, all relatively minor, and it will be ready for A-class. – Joe N 19:00, 26 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

All look good now. – Joe N 16:46, 27 May 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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Cheers, Abraham, B.S. (talk) 06:39, 1 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

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