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I've listed this article for peer review because… it has just become a WP:Good article. I would like to know what else needs to be done before I take it to WP:FAC, as I am all out of ideas.
I am also concerned about the length of the plot section. WP:MOSTV says "As a rough guide, summaries for episode articles should be about 200 to 500 words. Complicated plots may take more space to present than simpler plots." This is an article about two episodes so the plot has been split into two parts. The word count for Part 1 is 653, and the count for Part 2 is 453, making a total of 1106. If anyone has any suggestions of how to lower the word count, especially for Part 1, while still making it understandable, that'd be great.
Thank you, Matthewedwards (talk • contribs • email) 22:10, 17 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
- Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)
- "from a pop song – in this case" maybe an en or em dash here without the spaces I think.
- The Episode number in the infobox currently says "Season 1 Episode 1 Episode 2" (with breaks) - I would prefer it to say Season 1, episodes 1 & 2 (or similar).
- Also, while your lead starts with "the pilot episode" it soon transpires it's a two-part pilot with, therefore, two episodes.
- "reunited some of those characters in a ten-year high school reunion" reunited + reunion is a little samey.
- I couldn't find this sentence...
- "soft-pedals though the " through?
- "enters the room wanting to visit a website for her school reunion. They all look through the old photographs which have been uploaded to the website, and Christine tells the girls her ten-year high school reunion is approaching." this may have been the order in which it happened but it appears a little odd for her to start looking at the old photos together before explaining why.
- "meet someone from the Internet she has never met" maybe "meet someone she has only met over the internet"? People, after all, don't "come from the internet"!
- "Jordan is legitimate" sounds like questioning his parentage! I know what you mean but perhaps "Jordan's intentions are legitimate" (or something along those lines)
- "Caitlin meets Mr. Simpson – or "Snake" as he was known in school – who greets her emphatically." - en or em dash and no spaces again I think. Double-check with WP:DASH for me? And check other instances of this?
- done It allows either spaced endashes or unspaced emdashes, at the editor's discretion.
- Prefer to see director and producer image on the right-hand side.
- "The exterior of Degrassi Community School is " or was (to be consistent perhaps)?
- Maybe worth emphasising McDonald's previous efforts where actually films.
- One quote box has quotation marks, the other quote box doesn't.
- Ref 6 has "p. R.3.. " - not quite sure what that means?
- It's the page number, but also because the newspaper is split into sections, much like the UK's Sunday Times is. R. is the section, 3 is the page number.
- Ref 9 links Epitome Pictures twice.
Hope that helps a little. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:46, 19 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Yes, thank you. It's much appreciated! Matthewedwards (talk • contribs • email) 02:10, 20 August 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Comments from Ealdgyth (talk · contribs)
- You said you wanted to know what to work on before taking to FAC, so I looked at the sourcing and referencing with that in mind. I reviewed the article's sources as I would at FAC.
- Hope this helps. Please note that I don't watchlist Peer Reviews I've done. If you have a question about something, you'll have to drop a note on my talk page to get my attention. (My watchlist is already WAY too long, adding peer reviews would make things much worse.) 19:25, 22 August 2008 (UTC)