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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to get it to FL status.
Thanks, iMatthew (talk) 14:59, 20 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]
I know very little about the WWE, but I've worked on a few lists, so I'll have a crack at this.
- I agree about the lead. Perhaps you could briefly introduce the WWE and why they have PPV events?
- Perhaps you need to change the placement of the tables. For example, the first one, Current pay-per-view events, should be placed lower in the History section so that it's not the first thing the reader sees.
- The first sentence is very unclear. The citation given is for the Rosemont Hotel being the site of the first PPV event, but not for the rest of the info. This sentence claims that the source cited is incorrect about the Rosemont, but there's nothing to back it up. There's also no source about Wrestlemania being the first PPV event. This is something you must address.
- "The first two WrestleManias were undeniable financial successes, and after WrestleMania III became perhaps the best event in wrestling history, the WWF then decided to expand their pay-per-view offerings." Again, no sources. In addition, this sentence is full of peacock terms: "undeniable financial success", "perhaps the best event in wrestling history". Comment - Reworded a litte, will try and look for reference.
- "The first Survivor Series event was offered on November 29, 1987, scheduled directly against NWA's Starrcade, traditionally considered to be that promotion's biggest yearly event."
- "traditionally considered": by whom? This should be more clear. "Was offered": same problem. Perhaps it can be: "The first Survivor Series event occurred on November 29, 1987, scheduled to conflict with NWA's Starrcade." Done - Changed to that.
- The sentence that begins, "These four events -" is too long. Break it up or delete some of the info. Done - Attempted to split up a bit.
- This trend escalated to the point that by 1996, both companies showed monthly events on pay-per-view. Until recently, World Wrestling Entertainment had a once-a-month pay-per-view schedule, which they had from the late '90s until 2003 totalling twelve a year. The pay-per-view events in the United States can be bought through iN DEMAND, Dish Network or DirecTV.
- What trend? I assume it's refers to the previous paragraph, but it's unclear that it was a trend. It says, "until recently" and then it says that WWE had a monthly PPV schedule until the late 90s until 2003. "Totalling (a misspelling) twelve a year is redundant. The next sentence should be: "The pay-per-view events in the United States are offered by iN DEMAND, Dish Network or DirecTV". Done - The second part, I'd have to leave it to iMatthew for the first part.
- "they were scrapped in favor of": seems colloquial. Done - Changed to removed.
- "announced to move on with": colloquial again. Done - Changed to continue.
- "tr-branded": typo, "tri-branded". As as WWE-dummy, I have no idea what that term means. Done - Fixed typo, again I'll have to leave that to iMatthew.
- I agree with SRX about the tables; they are a mess.
- The sources aren't reliable enough to me, but I tend to be a stickler. After just a cursory look, it looks like the about.com is the only strictly reliable source. I expect that wrestling articles and lists would be an exception, since this list is about their PPV events, and they would know. It may prevent you from getting to FL, though.
Hope this helps! --Figureskatingfan (talk) 22:10, 21 September 2008 (UTC)[reply]