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I've listed this article for peer review as the third in a series of five such lists. My goal is to get the series to featured list status.

Thanks, Otto4711 (talk) 16:56, 1 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ruhrfisch comments: Since I peer reviewed the previous article in the series, it is interesting to read this and to see the changes the 1970s. Here are some suggestions for improvement.

• I was going to say spell out the abbreviation LGBT in the lead, then I read the article and learned it is not always clear what it stands for. Would it be OK to say something like "LGBT (often understood as Lesbian, Gay, Bisexual and Transexual)" to define it for those unclear on the meaning of the term? Spelling out abbreviations is required by the MOS in general.
• I think the references to 1961 tv shows (outside of the scope of this list) in the lead at least need a ref. Not sure if a more general statement would work.
• Article needs a copyedit to clean up the language in several places, for example Protests against the 1975 Marcus Welby episode "The Outrage" with its male child molestation plot and the aforementioned killer lesbian trio from the Police Woman episode "Flowers of Evil" led producers [to] started moving away from the killer queer plot device. OR In "Edith's Crisis of Faith", Edith learns of Beverly's murder and this causes her to question her belief in God. is incomprehensible to me - who is Beverly? Why was she murdered? How is this a LGBT themed episode?
• Per WP:LEAD the lead should have an image in the upper right corner.
• The formatting of the table is a bit distracting in places - especially where there are multiple episodes for one show. Is there any way to make the rows the same across the columns? Or would it make sense to split the table up so each epsidoe is its own row ?
• These two sentences are repetitive and could be combined: Interestingly, television has tended to present transgender characters in a sympathetic light from the beginning. Dating back to Robert Reed's turn as a transgender doctor on Medical Center in 1975, transgender characters and issues have tended to receive sympathetic treatment.[3]
• I found it interesting that so many of the Pre-Stonewall episodes were news programs / roundtables / documentaries, but there seem to be none here (unless I missed one). Is this worth mentioning?
• I was surprised Billy Crystal's character on Soap is not mentioned - the show aired in the late 1970s and he played an openly gay character.

Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch _><>°^° 05:12, 8 February 2009 (UTC)[reply]