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I've listed this article for peer review because it failed a GA nomination, and I would like it to be as good as possible before I renominate it. If you would like me to review a PR or GAN in return for your comments here please let me know and I will be happy to help. :)

Thanks, Freikorp (talk) 09:32, 8 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for taking some time in reviewing my article. Here are some comments as a thank you for helping out =) jona^(talk) 16:52, 28 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]

• Do you know any of his parent's name and their occupations?
• Why not link AIDS?
• For clarification, did his father died in jail?
• Should link 1983 Grammy Awards to 25th Annual Grammy Awards
• Overlinking with Nicole Ritchie
• You want to make sure that readers know Mandy Moore was his girlfriend at the time, when she flew to be by his side (ex: then-girlfriend)
• Per WP:NUMERAL, all numbers below 10 should be written out (DJ AM spent 3 years performing)
• Inconsistency with ref styles (only one found; Ref#43 which also needs a UPC number)

• Thanks so much for your comments. I've addressed these concerns. Unfortunately I couldn't find information on his parents occupations, or whether his father died in jail, though I was able to find out when his father died and added this in chronological order to the article. And Mandy Moore was his ex-girlfriend at the time, apparently they were still close though. Feel free to contact me with any further comments, but i'll be closing this peer review as it's been open for there weeks now and i'd like to nominate another article. Thanks again. Freikorp (talk) 00:43, 29 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]