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- History: "The first player to captain France in a major international competition while playing under FIFA was Andre Francois. Francois...". Try not to have the names repeat like this in the sentence transition.
- Done. — JSRant Away 21:51, 8 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Same goes for "One of the first permanent captains of the national team was Jean Ducret. Ducret...". This could probably be made into a single sentence without much trouble.
- Done. — JSRant Away 21:51, 8 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Don't need to link World War II twice in the span of two sentences. It may not even require a link at all, since it's such a well-known subject; how helpful is the link?
- Done. — JSRant Away 21:51, 8 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- "the captaincy regularly alternated between Zinedine Zidane and Patrick Vieira. Vieira...". This is like the first two comments from me. Switching Zidane and Vieira around in the first sentence seems like the easiest possible fix.
- Done. — JSRant Away 21:51, 8 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- I don't understand "injuries propelled his stint as captain". Propelled in this context would mean something different than what I think the intention is (that the injuries prevented him from serving as captain at that event). Was "curtailed" or similar what you meant?
- Done. — JSRant Away 21:51, 8 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- "was the national team's all-time leading goalscorer Thierry Henry. Henry...". Another one of these repetitions. Might as well get it along with the others.
- Done. — JSRant Away 21:51, 8 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- List of Captains: We already know from the title of the page that this is a list. Does it really need to be repeated here? I feel this would be better served as Captains, which is a bit simpler.
- In references 7, 9, 21, 25, 27, 30, 34, and 41 should all have the publishers italicized, as they're all printed publications.
- Done. — JSRant Away 21:51, 8 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- What makes History in an Hour (reference 22) a reliable source? It appears to be a blog.
- Found a more reputable source. — JSRant Away 21:51, 8 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Removed source. — JSRant Away 21:51, 8 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
One more from reference 35, which I missed the first time around: the contraction "haven't" should be removed in favor of "have not". Actually, I think this and reference 36 would be more accurately listed as notes, to distinguish them from the citations. Giants2008 (27 and counting) 21:08, 15 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
- Done. — JSRant Away 22:37, 16 June 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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