This is a very interesting article. You did a good job setting up the article and explaining both theories of an anoxic or dysoxic environment. You also provided a great deal of information throughout the article from your many references, which is good. Some things that could be improved are:
Overall the article is well written for a draft page and cleaning it up shouldn't be that difficult.
Overall I think the article is good, just add some internal wiki links and make it easier for the everyday person to understand.
Your page is well developed! I would add more links to other wikipedia pages on some of the words you used in the opening paragraph. You may even want to give a definition of "anoxic". Dr. Webb explained that our pages should be written for the high school level, and few high school students are exposed to this material. You may want to "dumb it down" a little bit. I know that sounds rediculous, but I think the effect of the page may be aided by that action.
The last sentence may need some revision to aid in the flow of the idea.
The drawing looks great! You may want to add a legend or do a little more labeling to it. All in all it looks great to me though! It looks like you put a lot of hard work and time into it!
The page flows well and is for the most part concise! I would try to add more links to other pages in order for the primary reading level (high school) can understand the topics covered. In addition to the links, you may want to simply define some of the words used. Again, I remember that I was exposed to very few geological ideas in high school, so you may want to keep that in mind during the revision process! Great Job!!! Jbour46 (talk) 13:14, 22 October 2012 (UTC)