The current article on the Hanapepe massacre fails to contextualize this event within the broader narrative of Hawaii's labor history. Much of the article reads as a collection of disparate events that struggle to form a cohesive history. In order to provide a more robust depiction of the Hanapepe Massacre, I intend to include the following subsections to the article:
Although this intended structure shifts the focus of the article away from the immediate events of the massacre at Hanapepe, I believe this proposal will more adeptly contextualize the event while discussing its socio-cultural significance.
The current article on multiracialism on Wikipedia is regretfully underdeveloped. Firstly, the scope of multiracialism as a concept implies a multinational, trans-regional approach to both the 1) historic moments which significantly furthered multiracialism as well as 2) the theoretical conceptualization of multiracial identities in a global landscape. However, the current article disproportionately focuses on the multiracial experience in the context of the United States, and conveys this information without legitimate references or citations. Subsequently, the lack of scope and direction of this article leads it to reading more like a personal essay or opinion piece rather than an encyclopedic entry.
Secondly, the current structure of this article has led the Wikipedia community to question its relevance-- especially since there is a collection of articles that focus on subjects that are fairly similar to multiracialism. For example, another article entitled "Biracial and multiracial identity development" outlines the multiracial experience in the United States-- thoroughly detailing discrimination, legislation, and theoretical conceptualizations regarding these identities. There is also a “Multiracial” article which provides definitions for mixed-race identities and outlines the specific histories of countries that have high rates of multiracial identification. Thus, I find it necessary to develop the multiracialism article to provide a more holistic perspective on multiracial experiences, histories, and ideologies on the global scale; and I hope to do so in a way that is not redundant given the current state of knowledge on Wikipedia.
To do so, I intend to focus on restructuring the article as such:
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