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Beginning in 1972 and ending with his death in 2008, Woods advocated— Honestly, it can just be "He advocated"
he secured a job with the Hawaii Department of Health— 'with' seems odd here. 'for'? 'in'?
in his capacity as executive director; Woods critiqued— should be a comma in place of the semi colon, I think/
Honolulu, Hawai'iand
University of Hawaii[emphasis added]. Interchange them.
in Arthur, Illinois before— missing MOS:GEOCOMMA
After graduating from the University of Hawaiʻi in 1971— Already mentionning in the immediately previous section.
After graduating from UH. ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 17:40, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
for four— "for the four"
After the Supreme Court's decision in— Specify 'United States' Supreme Court
had a circulation of 40,000 copies, 23,000 in Hawaii and 17,000 across the rest of the United States— exact or approximate?
If they were not successfully able to marry,— Rephrase (avoid starting a sentence with 'If', 'Had', etc.)
Woods planned to take them down the street to the headquarters of the ACLU of Hawaii if they were not successfully able to marry.ezlev (user/tlk/ctrbs) 17:40, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
but the media's attention— linking media appears to be WP:Overlinking
As of January 1992, Woods was executive director of the GLEAF.— Perhaps, "In Jan.."
(equivalent to $4,377 in 2021)— round off to 100s; same with other templates
Woods acquired nomination papers to run for Governor of Hawaii as a— lowercase 'G' per MOS:JOBTITLE
Nice article!
Pretty solid article; promoting! If you have time and inclination, would appreciate if you can review any of these. Thanks! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:58, 12 May 2022 (UTC)