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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:32, 21 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

• Three paras in the lead is too many, suggest you merge to form no more than two.

  Done.

• Is Stasi in italics or not?

  Not, it's just used as abbreviation.

• "treason acts and sentenced to death and subsequently" you already said in the first "para" of the lead that he was executed.

  Moved around a bit and improved (I hope) what I say about the trial in the lead.

• "after German Reunification when" no reason to capitalise reunification.

  Yup.

• Could link Capital punishment in Germany.

  Done.

• "went to school from" in Berlin?

  Had to check, yes.

• "the Abitur" this is in italics in our article, but could use an explanation in parentheses or a footnote.

  Footnote now, but the word could perhaps be removed. (For East Germans, whether they were allowed to study was more to do with politics than with school).

• "the SED party" can you spell it out?

  Done

• "the 1976 Olympics" link and say where.

  Didn't get far, it was just the Innsbruck winter olympics.

• "after German Reunification in" see above.

  Done.

• " in 1993.[12] In 1998" repetitive.

  No longer I hope.

• "death penalty was abolished" link that capital punishment article.

  Yup.

• "based on elements from the" -> "based on aspects of the"

  ok

• Gieseke ref, en-dash in year range.

  Done.

• DIE WELT can be just Die Welt right?

  And linked.

• "Schnibben" ref, Der Spiegel and publication date outside the ref title.

  Improved.

• MDR.DE ref has mdr.de about three separate times in it.

  I don't have an author's name, so I use it as the author as well...

That's it for me. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 10:53, 27 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, all good points. I've started working on the lead, and will fix most of the issues soon, but some factual questions will need to stay open until Friday (I hope to lay my hands on another source then). —Kusma (talk) 23:08, 27 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man: Thank you for your comments, I think I've addressed them all? I now have access to Lange 2021, which has details on almost everything so if there's an aspect you'd like to hear more about, I can very likely provide more information. —Kusma (talk) 21:37, 30 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Made one more pass and added replies to each of your points. —Kusma (talk) 21:07, 2 October 2021 (UTC)[reply]