A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
""Rehab" came about after Rihanna was following Timbaland on his tour with Justin Timberlake in the United States in 2007." → What do you mean by 'following Timbland on his tour'?
Only the one source is used at the end of the paragraph, use it at the end of each sentence otherwise it will look like the first few sentences are WP:OR, when they aren't.
"Timberlake wrote the song's lyrics in his head and not on paper." → Re-write, doesn't make sense saying he wrote it in his head.
Not doneI still don't like the wording of the Timberlake having the lyrics in his head line, as well as the previous line about Timbaland creating the beat. Both don't flow.Calvin • 999
"She said that she was at that stage of the song's development; she, Timberlake and Timbaland were all very impressed and loved the song." → Doesn't make sense to read.
"Rihanna took control of the way she sounded on the record with confidence." → This doesn't make sense either.
I really don't have an idea how to write it on another way, can it be simply, About the songs lyrics Rihanna explained, or Rihanna explained the songs lyrics stating? Tomica1111 (talk) 13:53, 27 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
"Margeaux Watson from Entertainment Weekly" → "Margeaux Watson of Entertainment Weekly". Be consistent.
"It compares an ex-boyfriend to rehabilitation jargon of which include: diseases, drugs and depression. It talks about forgetting a boyfriend following a break-up.[4]" → Is this still apart of Watson's review?
"With the song, Rihanna became the first artist to extract eight Hot 100 hits from one album since Shania Twain who achieved an octet of U.S. chart hits from Come On Over (1997).[25]" → Re-word, doesn't quite flow.
"It also reached nineteen" → "It also peaked at number nineteen"
"and reached a peak of nineteen.[28]" → "and reached a peak position of nineteen.[28]"
"number thirty-seven on the issue dated November 17, 2008, and leaped to twenty-eight two weeks later." → Hardly a 'leap', it was ascended 9 places in the high twenties.
"after jumping twenty-seven places to number twenty-four.[33]" → Now 27 places is a leap! lol.
"The next week the song further..." →"The next week, the song further..."
"and has peaked at number nine.[35]" → "and peaked at number nine.[35]"
"seventh top-five there.[39]" → "seventh top-five in this territory.[39]"
Section Done. (There were 2 grammar errors which I have fixed for you.Calvin • 999
Music video - Development
"Mandler has directed many of Rihanna's music videos, including: "Disturbia" and "Unfaithful".[42]" → You say 'many', but you only mention two? I'd mention no more than four.
"Timberlake's then-girlfriend, and American actress, Jessica Biel was.." → "Timberlake's then-girlfriend, American actress Jessica Biel, was..."
"I'm the guy in the video. The guy in the video," → That doesn't make sense to read.
"A sneak-peak of the music video was released on November 13, 2008." → WP:OR
"On April 28, 2008, Rihanna performed the song live at the Pepsi Center. John Wenzel from The Denver Post said the following of the performance:" → Completely re-word.
"The song is fourth on Rihanna's setlist for her Good Girl Gone Bad Tour.[60]" → Re-word to the past tense.
"Before performing the song, she speaks to her audience saying the song was written by her very good friend, Justin Timberlake and that she hopes the audience likes it. She performs it wearing a revealing leather outfit singing into microphone stand." → WP:OR
""Rehab" is featured as twelfth track on Rihanna's setlist for her 2010 tour, Last Girl on Earth Tour.[61]" → Re-word to the past tense.
Ref 24: Why does it go work, title, publisher, and not title, work, publisher?
Calvin I really think you have some wrongs with the references numbers. Ref. no 24 is a chart reference, so uses other way of format. Tomica1111 (talk) 23:03, 25 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
No, I'm right. Look at ref 23, then have a look at ref 24 in the references section. The title is in between 'Billboard' and ' Prometheus Global Media', it should be the title, then 'Billboard', then ' Prometheus Global Media'. See now?Calvin • 999
I really can understand you, both references are fine to me.
Ref 23: "US Singles Top 100 (November 22, 2008) - Music Charts". Billboard. Prometheus Global Media. Retrieved 2010-09-04. (title, work, publisher)
Ref 24: "Rihanna Album & Song Chart History" Billboard Hot 100 for Rihanna. Prometheus Global Media. Retrieved 2010-08-31. (title, work, publisher) Tomica1111 (talk) 15:36, 27 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
That's not how it reads here though. Ref 23 is fine, perfect. Ref 24 should look like Ref 23.Calvin • 999
It reads the same in the references sections for Rehab, and I am not kidding. I copied the both upper texts from how it looks in the section. Maybe you have problems with your internet provider, check it again, I am not lying Tomica1111 (talk) 17:16, 27 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Lol I'm not saying you are lying, I just don't get why it shows up different. Maybe because for ref 24 'a' you haven't actually put a source, it only says "US Name". Plus, "Billboard" in ref 23 should be italicised.Calvin • 999
You need to be consistent in how you reference each and every source, using the same format.
You have a lot of work to do here Tomica! On hold for 7 days.Calvin • 999
From what you have done so far, it's still doesn't meet GA criteria. Some parts still need complete copy-editing. I'd suggest you ask a far more experienced editor to help you, especially with the Composition section, just to fine tune things and make the prose flow. Either that, or I fail the article and you list if for a Peer Review? Because GAN reviews aren't supposed to be this detailed, and that's what a Peer Review is for. Also, have you done all the corrections for the references or only the ones you have questioned?Calvin • 99922:51, 26 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I made some minor prose and grammar changes to help you out a bit, it was easier than spending more time writing it here and explaining it. Article is passed, well done! :)Calvin • 99915:22, 30 July 2011 (UTC)[reply]