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@Tim O'Doherty Thanks for taking up the review. I hope this is successful and that you are doing well in real life. Looking forward to the coming days and your subsequent comments. Regards MSincccc (talk) 17:25, 21 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Since the article's so short there isn't much need for a table...
Prose:
We have "King Charles III" and "Elizabeth II" - one style should be used consistently
her grandmother Diana, Princess of Wales - we have just "Charles" in the same sentence: "Diana" alone'll do.
On 4 May, ..., etc - commas aren't needed
She joined her brother Prince George - I'd put "older brother" here
On 8 September 2022, Charlotte's paternal great-grandmother Elizabeth II died - again with the comma, but you've told us who her great-grandmother is already: "Elizabeth" or "the Queen" will be fine.
Introduce Brand Finance
Due to the implementation of the Perth Agreement -> "Because of the implementation of the Perth Agreement"
Sources:
Don't use the Evening Standard or Fox News please - replace with something else
Some refs have quotes and others don't - I'd standardise that
Some refs have publisher locations (eg ref 5's "London") - all or nothing again
Inconsistencies between Telegraph refs (eg refs 6 and 21): differences between the name, italicisation, subscription parameter, etc. Standardise.
You have both "'BBC News" and "BBC": pick one
Sources I spotchecked: 1, 2, 8, 11, 14, 21 and 23 are generally fine, although 11 is Fox News and doesn't support that she was known as "Charlotte Cambridge"
On 8 September 2022,... This requires a comma as it is a full date rather than just the year or the month followed by the year. Removed publisher locations and also retaining "BBC News" not "BBC" as the former is more common. Regards MSincccc (talk) 02:13, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Sorry but I could not find suitable sources on the same event to replace Evening Standard. Would you please help me? Regards. MSincccc (talk) 02:25, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Making the changes now but in school my teacher does not accept it when we begin a sentence with "Because" and I am studying British English like you once did in middle school. Regards MSincccc (talk) 14:24, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Given all the prose-related changes I have now made, I hope this article will be passed as GA by tomorrow. Let me know if any further changes you would like to see in a Good Article. Regards MSincccc (talk) 14:31, 23 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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