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Something seems inconsistent. If he is still a member of the Michigan Wolverines, which appears to be the case, shouldn't there be a mention of Michigan's most recent bowl appearance in the "Bowl games" section?
"lowest rated" Maybe it should be hyphenated, maybe not. (If it should be, please correct all instances where the term is used in the article.) You probably know best how to deal with it.
"as both a 2012 Pop Warner National College Football Award finalist and a 2012 Allstate AFCA Good Works Team member" are there articles you could Wikilink to for either of those items?
"He made his first career start on November 7, 2009 when Perry Dorrestein was sidelined with a back injury against Purdue and stayed in the starting lineup for the final two games of the season for the 2009 team." Part of that needs to be reworded to make it clear who started the final two games
"By the end of the 2012 regular season finale Michigan–Ohio State football rivalry game," Might be a bit too many words there, I think "by the end of the 2012 Michigan–Ohio State game" would suffice (with appropriate wikilinking, of course)
"He joins Zoltan Mesko as the only Michigan players to ever receive the AFCA Good Works Team recognition." Perhaps "the only two Michigan players" would work better
You might consider adding appropriate portal links using the ((Portal bar)) template.
Ok, I will have further comments later, but for now, you might look into whether or not the personal life section could be expanded. Also, I don't believe it is necessary to link the same publisher more than once in the reference section. AutomaticStrikeout (T • C) 23:17, 15 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
The reason links are considered redundant in the text when they are repeated is because we assume the reader has read the text above. We do not assume that the reader reads each ref, so they should stand alone. Thus, links can be repeated.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 00:09, 16 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
If more information cannot be found for the personal life section, you might consider merging it if possible. Also, you might move the information about his appetite there.
I'll give you a couple of days to try and find a bit more content for the article, in case there is some more that could be said, but I think this is pretty close to passing right now. AutomaticStrikeout (T • C) 17:00, 16 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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