The writing/production sentence should be the second of the lead instead
Done, but is this standard for song articles? —VersaceSpace🌃 20:51, 28 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Add a sentence directly before the release one mentioning when the song was confirmed followed by the teaser
Not done, @K. Peake: not sure what you mean by this. Are you suggesting that the first sentence of the paragraph be moved to directly before the official release sentence? —cybertrip👽 ( 💬 • 📝) 16:46, 3 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"Commercially, the song reached the top 10" it reached the top 10 in other countries too, so shouldn't you add the number then write, including...? Make sure everything here is written out in the body, though.
Rewrote the entire commercial sentence. Sorry for throwing spanners in the works but I think it reads better now —cybertrip👽 ( 💬 • 📝) 16:24, 2 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"Ireland and the United States." → "Ireland, and the United States."
Not done Not relevant as its not done, and most music videos are released at the same time as the single anyway. —cybertrip👽 ( 💬 • 📝) 16:24, 2 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"explores the nightlife environment" → "explores the futuristic environment"
Wikilink music video and move the release to the music video section, however the 16 hours part is not sourced
Partly done couldn't find a source for the exact time besides YouTube Data Viewer so I omitted it and wrote "soon after" the midnight single release to give the impression that the two weren't released simultaneously. —cybertrip👽 ( 💬 • 📝) 16:24, 2 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The track listing and album art being announced are not sourced
The song is not mentioned on the best of 2021 list but if you can find what the original source was, add the name of the writer too
Not done: the song is #1 on the Vulture list. —VersaceSpace🌃 16:58, 31 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Cut down the amount of direct quoting from Uproxx after the first sentence; I think it would be better to start a sentence one with "Gracie elaborated that..." putting some into your own words
"She begins to flirt with a man whom she shares a dance with before" → "Doja Cat begins to flirt with a man whom she spends time in the club with, before"
Not done, as much as this avoids repetition, it completely changes the meaning of the sentence. —cybertrip👽 ( 💬 • 📝) 18:38, 2 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"the video they return to the dancefloor before" → "the video, they return to the dancefloor, before" but none of this sentence is sourced
@Cybertrip: My device can't access the archive website, would you mind handling this? —VersaceSpace🌃 04:49, 5 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I've tried doing this yesterday but I think either the system is down or my computer is too slow lol. —cybertrip👽 ( 💬 • 📝) 17:42, 5 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
VersaceSpace You should try to fix the remaining issues and regarding The Needle Drop, it is even more unreliable if being used for something like actual comp rather than critical commentary and Forbes contributors are written off at WP:FORBES. --K. Peake 07:48, 6 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I was talking about the archiving issue, but I removed both things you mentioned. Pinging User:Kyle Peake. —VersaceSpace🌃 04:50, 7 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@Kyle Peake: this reply doesn't make sense. Where did you ask the first time? And how do you suggest I do this? —VersaceSpace🌃 17:52, 7 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@VersaceSpace: The reply was not worded well by me since it was routed in the false premise that you had definitely used the fix dead links tool; click on view history and select this option from the far right. --K. Peake 06:43, 8 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Not done, not sure what source you're referring to but I assume its Needle Drop. I personally think we can let this slide since it's literally just being used to describe the attribute of a hi-hat sound. I agree with most editors that Fantano's album reviews should not be used as valid, opinionated "reviews" on Wikipedia since they are self-published and unprofessional, but this is not such a case since it's something so specific and rather objective. —cybertrip👽 ( 💬 • 📝) 20:41, 5 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Not done, again, these chart positions being cited here are objective facts and aren't liable to editorial oversight that is warned about in WP:RSP (where it actually is listed as "generally reliable" so I don't see the problem here).
Remove or replace ref 41 with an actual Billboard citation
Not done: Not sure what this means —VersaceSpace🌃 17:08, 31 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@Kyle Peake: is a tweet from a verified Billboard Twitter account not sufficient? —VersaceSpace🌃 20:17, 5 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Not done, Euphoriazine is not a self-published source. The A-listers on their covers speaks for itself. —cybertrip👽 ( 💬 • 📝) 20:50, 5 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I'm not too sure about refs 58 and 59; are you sure it isn't a gossip website?
Does it matter even if these articles are just being used for the Doja Cat tweets that they have embedded in them (in order to avoid WP:TWEET)? —cybertrip👽 ( 💬 • 📝) 20:50, 5 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Cite Lakes Media Network as publisher instead on ref 60
By the way, @Kyle Peake: could you re-affirm the ref numbers? Some of these are off because they were reordered. —VersaceSpace🌃 04:49, 5 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
On hold until all of the issues are fixed; this is a bit messy in parts but should be resolved alright! --K. Peake 11:23, 28 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
VersaceSpace Regarding the changes that you are confused about, I meant the release sentence should use "the album" instead of its title which has been fixed now and write August 31 instead, so it is less repetitive. Also, the accolades should be a separate para in reception and written out in prose since one small table is not enough to warrant a full section. --K. Peake 09:16, 29 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
VersaceSpace I have further comments for you; why does the Vulture ref not show "Need to Know" when I load it, can you replace the Twitter ref with a citation from Billboard magazine's website and when will you implement the remaining changes? --K. Peake 07:46, 2 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Hi @Kyle Peake: I've been waiting for Cybertrip to implement some reference changes since they expanded the article, but it seems like he's a bit busy, would waiting for him be okay? Also, would you be fine with me removing the points that have been addressed with Done. —VersaceSpace🌃 14:10, 2 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
VersaceSpace I would be fine with waiting for him, however what do you mean about removing the points? --K. Peake 07:39, 3 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Never mind, I bolded the points that are incomplete for easy viewing. —VersaceSpace🌃 15:30, 3 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
VersaceSpace Is there anything left that you have yet to implement, or should I do a read through now? --K. Peake 20:11, 8 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Nothing left that I can see on this page, Kyle Peake. Please do. —VersaceSpace🌃 20:13, 8 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
✓Pass now, impressive job on this one! --K. Peake 20:25, 8 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@VersaceSpace: Periodd!! Good ass article (even though it says nothing about the reversed hi-hats haha). Thanks for nominating it and sorry I didn’t carry my load well enough. You’re a great editor :) —cybertrip👽 ( 💬 • 📝) 06:39, 17 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]