Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.
If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)
I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.
Best of luck! you can also use the ((done)) tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski(talk • contribs)
Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.
It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria -
It contains copyright infringements -
It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include((cleanup)), ((POV)), ((unreferenced)) or large numbers of ((citation needed)), ((clarify)), or similar tags. (See also ((QF-tags))). -
It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. -
You're right in that "Guitar" is a class of instruments, but for most people it implies a classical guitar which is higher pitched. I'll think about this.
I think this article is missing a paragraph explaining what a mute is, outside of what is described in the lede. Remember, an article should be understandable without reading the lede (and vise versa). Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(talk • contribs)15:39, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Working on it.
Okay, I've tried to write a overview containing info in the lead that's not in the body.
Done Said "musical notation" specifically, which I think is sufficiently precise
Lots of repetition of words in this article - if you see the same word twice in a sentence, think how you could reword to avoid. Such as bell in "They are most often directly inserted into the instrument's bell, but can also be clipped or held onto the end of the bell". Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(talk • contribs)15:39, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Done I fixed the ones I could without introducing syntactic ambiguity in this diff. I'll keep this in mind for my future writing.
An early version of the harmon mute was patented by John F. Stratton in 1865,[31] and the mute in its modern form was patented[32] in 1925 by George Schluesselburg.[33] - can we move all these refs to the end of the sentence. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(talk • contribs)15:48, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Partly done I think the nickname is relevant because most sources refer to him as Paddy (including all the books I have on the topic), but I removed the death
Done Rephrased to "... believe that dents on the mute's chamber improve sound..." For reference, this is what I'm talking about. The dents, at least in my experience, usually come from the mute falling out of the bell
Question: In the second sentence of that section I wrote "By inserting their hand fully into the instrument, airflow is limited, producing a quiet and nasal sound." Is this enough?
Done (Ely) says "Shaped like a felt hat, derby mutes are held over the bell, without touching it. Originally, old felt hats were used." I guess I'll add "or similarly shaped object", since (Koehler) also does say it can literally be a bowler hat.
I've made some inital comments, some are quite general. I think the big thing this article is missing is a section on what a mute is within the prose. Placed on hold. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski(talk • contribs)15:49, 13 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]