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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 03:28, 31 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take a look at this and copyedit as I go (please revert if I accidentally change the meaning), and jot queries below. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 03:28, 31 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• All four paras in lead start with (±Mia) Hamm.. - try to mix things up a little.

Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 01:24, 3 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• Soon her whole family became very involved in the sport - "very" unnecessary

Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 01:24, 3 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• Hamm played sports beginning at a very young age - scans oddly, why not just, "Hamm played sports from a (very) young age". I'd also ditch the "very" as comes across as laboured and redundant.

Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 01:24, 3 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• North Carolina only lost one game in the ninety five she played on the team - I'd say "of" not "in" here.

Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 01:24, 3 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• there was no fully professional women's soccer league in the United States - is the word "fully" needed here? was the predecessor league part professional or amateur?

Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 01:24, 3 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• It'd be good if we could add anything to the Washington Freedom, 2001–03 section to buff it up a bit. Also, try to figure a way to avoid having a one sentence paragraph...

Expanded. Hmlarson (talk) 20:52, 18 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• The Endorsements section is slim. Anything about how much the endorsements were for or anything else to buff the section would be good.

Expanded and moved under In Popular Culture header. Hmlarson (talk) 20:52, 18 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• You mention Garret Hamm and aplastic anemia in two separate sections, if this could be rationalised somehow to reduce repetition that would be good.

Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 01:24, 3 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• It would be good to use the Burke biography as an inline ref - e.g. on page 28 it says Garret died after 10 years of the disease.

Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 01:24, 3 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• In fact, I'd dispense with the further reading section - these books should either be the source of content or dropped.

Updated.Hmlarson (talk) 06:34, 3 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• Web references should all have accessdate, date, author etc. Some are link only. And there is at least one deadlink.

Updated.Hmlarson (talk) 06:34, 3 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Overall, looks good. Am trying to give it a big a shove as possible towards FAC. It'd be great to get this on the mainpage. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 09:53, 31 May 2017 (UTC)[reply]

• expand 1996 Atlanta Olympics
• expand 1999 FIFA Women's World Cup
• expand 2003 FIFA Women's World Cup
• expand 2004 Olympics
• expand Washington Freedom
• expand Endorsements
• In popular culture section?
• review honors and awards

Hmlarson (talk) 06:47, 3 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Casliber: I'm done with this round of updates if you are able to take a look. Thank you. Hmlarson (talk) 21:11, 18 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

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Pass or Fail: - great, well done. I feel it is within striking distance of FA-hood, if you want to take it to FAC. Only slight quibble is I feel the photo of her taking the corner would be better for the infobox but it's not a big deal...just a great photo. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 09:34, 19 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for reviewing Casliber. I've swapped a couple photos and added another quote. I'll see about FAC. Hmlarson (talk) 17:05, 19 June 2017 (UTC)[reply]