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Reviewer: Ucucha 16:11, 12 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

I'll be starting a review. Ucucha 16:11, 12 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Good point. Removed. – VisionHolder « talk » 19:25, 12 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I think I've fixed it. Please let me know. – VisionHolder « talk » 19:25, 12 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Some points:
  • "Despite a scientific survey of the mountains in the region by the 1929 Mission Franco-Anglo-Américaine,[4] it was not surveyed until 1937" sounds very self-contradictory. Do you mean that while other mountains in the region were surveyed, Marojejy was not? Also, this 1929 Mission was the same one that brought us Monticolomys, and I think it deserves a red link.
  • "The massif was not formally described"—what does "formally described" mean in the context of a mountain?
  • I'm not sure how geologists say it. The sources say, "the MarojejyMassif was first described by Professor Henri Humbert," so I followed their wording, and treated it like a biological species description. I added "formally" in a feeble attempt to clarify between the earlier survey and the latter description. – VisionHolder « talk » 21:31, 12 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Ucucha 20:14, 12 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Good catch! It should be fixed now. – VisionHolder « talk » 19:25, 12 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
I'm sorry... I wrote this at 3am, and my collaborators who did the proofread and said it all looked good.  ;-) Thanks for catching that badly messed-up sentence. – VisionHolder « talk » 19:25, 12 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Very good catch! I misread the source. – VisionHolder « talk » 19:25, 12 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Ucucha 16:56, 12 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the fixes; I'm passing the article now. Ucucha 13:52, 13 February 2011 (UTC)[reply]