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I feel as though it would sound more natural to say "The Logan Sapphire has been on display in the National Gem Collection of the National Museum of Natural History in Washington, D.C., since [year]", as opposed to using "As of" (same thing for the second-to-last sentence of the article), though if you disagree, then "As of" should use ((As of)) rather than plain text.
"The Logan Sapphire is one of the largest faceted blue sapphires in the world" → does this mean it has the largest faces? This is a bit unclear
No, this was meant to convey that of the faceted blue sapphires in the world, it is one of the largest of them (so referring to the entire gemstone). This was a little tricky, but I switched "faceted" and "blue", so that it now reads "one of the largest blue faceted sapphires in the world" – does that extra separation between "largest" and "faceted" help? DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"The diamonds were likely taken from an antique bracelet or necklace." → This sentence is unsourced; if it uses Ref 2 at the end of the next sentence, just use Ref 2 here again
Yep, ref 2 (source: "A close examination of the setting reveals that the round diamonds surrounding the sapphire likely were part of an antique necklace or bracelet that was repurposed to make the sapphire brooch/pendant.") → re-added the footnote as suggested
"It is a "Ceylon sapphire", a name given to Sri Lankan sapphires" → I'm not sure how necessary this is, but it could potentially be helpful to note that "Ceylon" used to be the name of Sri Lanka
Hi PCN02WPS, thanks for the review! These comments were helpful, I've responded to each of them above. Let me know if you have any additional feedback or comments! DanCherek (talk) 17:14, 21 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Awesome, this one looks good to me! I'm happy with the changes and I don't see anything else that would warrant fixing so I'm happy to give this a pass. Well done! PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 00:37, 22 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
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