I think the infobox is a bit sloppy and confusing. I would prefer that each title have its own officeholder type section. It is not clear what title the successor is relevant for. I am not sure how much would be lost converting the infobox to that format. If there is significant content loss, we should discuss another way to clarify the currently confusion content.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:22, 19 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I am disappointed at the tone of this section and hope it does not continue throughout. It is as if the editors are hesitant to synthesize the RS and convert them into an encyclopedic entry. The article seems to attempt to retain a folksy tone, which is unencyclopedic.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:44, 19 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"a small private school in the tradition of the one-room schoolhouse" does not sound encyclopedic.
"As an adult, Wales was sharply critical of the government’s treatment of the school, citing the “constant interference and bureaucracy and very sort of snobby inspectors from the state” as a formative influence on his political philosophy." comes from nowhere almost assuming the reader is acquainted with examples of interference and bureaucracy.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 06:44, 19 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
In my mind the ways to make this parallel are to change to either "and having written computer codes during his leisure time" or "and having been a computer code writer during his leisure time" or "and has written computer codes during his leisure time"--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 00:27, 6 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"had struggled" had not necessary. It is generally more encyclopedic to write all past events in the simple past tense. Past perfect sort of has a grammatical purpose here to show that his struggles came before another past event, but since this is a chronological biographical article all past events come before other past events except the last one. Just use past tense throughout.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:14, 21 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"In an October 2009 speech, Wales recollects attempting to write a Nupedia article on Nobel Prize-winning economist Robert C. Merton, but being too intimidated to submit his first draft to the prestigious finance professors who were to peer review it, even though he had published a paper on Option Pricing Theory and was comfortable with the subject matter." is grammatically awkward. Break it down.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 05:14, 21 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"his participation in the Wikipedia project saw him flying internationally on a near-constant basis as its public face" I think saw should be has seen. There should be some sort of date attached to this. Was he flying non-stop in 2003?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 00:09, 23 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Done
I am not sure I agree with the sectioning. The section titled controversy is about his role in the founding and the section role is about his role in the ongoing entity. Reconsider the sectioning here.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 00:09, 23 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I once saw Wales state on Jon Stewart or Stephen Colbert (probably Stewart) that Wikipedia operates under the laws of the state of Florida because it is incorporated there. Is that relevant to the first sentence of this section?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 13:32, 26 February 2012 (UTC)[reply]
To say, this is just too much for me to do alone. I have made many changes to the article, put personality rights on images, etc. Please, help me to fix the article.-— Preceding unsigned comment added by Dipankan001 (talk • contribs) 05:11, 25 March 2012