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in Hounslow of the London Borough of Hounslow- I would either clarify what Hounslow is, e.g. "in the town of Hounslow within the London Borough of Hounslow", or just replace "of" with "within". In either case, this sounds strange because "Hounslow" is repeated here, and the first mention is the town while the second instance is the borough.
Opened as Hounslow Barracks- When did it open?
it was initially served by the District Railway. The Piccadilly line was extended here in 1933, and District line services were fully withdrawn in 1964- I would suggest mentioning how the District line was related to the District Railway. It's implied that the District line served the station first as part of the District Railway, and this is the first mention of the District line.
which resulted in its platforms being relocated- "which resulted in the station's platforms being relocated". Otherwise it's a dangling modifier that refers to the Picc's extension to Heathrow.
VincentLUFan (talk) (Kenton!) 04:53, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
Location
where it was a reference for part of the old name of the station- I wonder if this can be rephrased, e.g. "which served as a reference for part of the old name of the station", or "to which part of the station's old name referred".
History
It was named in reference to the Cavalry Barracks, Hounslow south of the station on Beavers Lane- Cavalry Barracks, Hounslow was already linked in the Location section, so it may be unlinked per WP:OVERLINK.
Services were only a shuttle to Osterley & Spring Grove,- for the first 2 years (21 July 1884 to 31 March 1886)?
The DR took over all of its railway services in 1903- was the branch still a shuttle? I assume so.
with its alignment reconfigured to three platforms- "with the station's alignment"
District line services were progressively reduced to rush-hour services in the late 1950s- rush-hour only?
The line was planned to be extended from Hounslow West to serve Heathrow Airport since the 1960s.- I think there is an inconsistency in verbs here: "was" refers to a single time point in the past but "since the 1960s" indicates that the past tense verb should be continuous. It should either be "An extension of the line had been planned [...] since the 1960s" or "The line was planned to be extended [...] starting in the 1960s".
groundbreaking ceremony by Sir Desmond Plummer- Out of curiosity, was he the host, the actual "groundbreaker", or just an attendee?
The new rerouted tracks meant that the existing had to be reduced to single track operation until the station approach- From which point until the station approach? Was only one track at the station being used at a given time?
The station today
Portland stone was used for the facade, strengthened by a reinforced concrete base.- Perhaps the first paragraph can be split here, so there are separate paragraphs for the architects and the design.
In addition to its drum shape being heptagonal, its ceiling contains this pattern- The ceiling has the same pattern as the side walls of the ticket hall?
The station is a Grade II listed building.- I would personally mention this before going into the specifics of the design, though it's fine in its current position too.
However the artwork was never installed- Was there a specific reason for this? I understand if there's no info about it.
Services and connections
Services going via the Terminal 4 loop continue as a service to Cockfosters- Is note 5 necessary? I assume we can just mention this in the prose. I'm looking at a related good article, Boston Manor tube station, which says
12 tph eastbound to Cockfosters or Arnos Grove; 6 tph westbound via the Heathrow Terminal 4 loop; 6 tph westbound to Heathrow Terminal 5. On that note, I assume that some eastbound trains from Hounslow West also short turn at Arnos Grove.
Notable commutes
"Boston Manor tube station" (Map). Google Maps.- I would use ((google maps)) instead of ((cite map)). Same for reference 7
"Google Maps" (Map). Hounslow West Station.
Hounslow West Underground Station - Busshould probably be formatted into a full citation.
Constance, Don (3 May 2018). "Hounslow West ticket hall". Flickr.is acceptable, though if there is a better source that describes the ticket hall in detail, it should replace the Flickr source. I see a little detail here (actually the current reference 5) that can supplement the Flickr reference.