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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 04:25, 2 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Happy to take on this. Posting my comments in a few days. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 04:25, 2 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
Fairly well-written, only a few comments:
- General
- Two dablinks need to be fixed [1]
- Say either "African American" or "African-American" throughout the article.
- Lead
- Per WP:MOSLEAD, the lead should be three good paras long covering all the major aspects of the article.
Will give a thorough read once done.
- The lead reads much better now, but the variants and racial stereotypes should also be mentioned, add a few lines.
- History
- The section appears a bit choppy, please combine paras.
- We generally don't wikilink continents
- Would be good to add when the middle ages were.
- in the 18th and 19th century, in the United States Is the comma needed?
- I think "lard" should be wikilinked
- Source for the 3rd para?
- among both blacks and whites Should we call them so even when we talk of the present day?
- The economic/caloric necessity...today's fried chicken. Still appears unsourced.
- I see a bit of overciting at the end of the fourth para.
- Can this section be illustrated to make it more interesting? Perhaps with an image of lard?
- Description
- Can this section be expanded? Are there no other sources that can describe its composition and impact on health?
- Convert templates for 40 grams, 12 grams
- Source for last line of 2nd para?
- is filled with fat I think "consists mainly of fat" sounds more proper here.
- monosodium glutamate (or MSG), which is a dangerous acid Can you include something on its effects on health?
- in any of the methods described above I think you refer to the methods in the next section. Should the last para then belong to "Preparation"?
- Preparation
- The section appears a bit choppy, please combine paras.
- Paras 1, 2, 4 and 5 are unsourced.
- The batter can/may contain "can" should be enough
- Why is Chicken Maryland mentioned separately? It is just like any other variety.
Rest looks good. No copyvio detected. Images are in order. The above addressed, I would be happy to promote this. Cheers, Sainsf (talk · contribs) 11:37, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks for the review. I'll try to clean this up and hopefully I'll get back to you in a few days. Omni Flames let's talk about it 11:57, 3 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Sainsf: I've finished fixing everything you brought up here. Omni Flames let's talk about it 00:38, 4 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Thanks. I have added a few more comments. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:33, 4 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Sainsf, I've hopefully resolved these issues now. Let me know if there's anything still withstanding that needs to be fixed. Omni Flames let's talk about it 11:33, 4 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Awesome! This can be promoted now. Great job! Sainsf (talk · contribs) 11:49, 4 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- Great! Thank you, Sainsf for such a thorough review. Omni Flames let's talk about it 23:04, 4 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]