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The sentence that begins with "Urhan was an early champion of Schubert" is a little confusing. (It took me a couple of read-throughs to understand it.) I suggest splitting it into more than one sentence and perhaps using a pair of em-dashes to enclose the passage listing out the titles of Urhan's works.
"Liszt allegedly fell asleep during this": MOS:DOUBT. It would be more helpful to the reader if this observation were clearly attributed to somebody (i.e. "According to...").
Just checked this against the source (it wasn't my addition) and it isn't there, I've removed it completely.
"in order to support his daughter Cosima's festival dedicated to her late husband Richard Wagner": The wording implies that the Bayreuth Festival was established by Cosima after Wagner's death. (He managed to participate in two iterations.)
Ditto "while in Bayreuth for Cosima's festival dedicated to Wagner".
"Hamilton identifies": Who Hamilton is and why he is relevant to Liszt needs to be established for the reader.
The article appears to not use the Oxford comma, but it does show up occasionally (e.g. "Up to 1840, most concerts featuring a solo pianist included other acts, such as an orchestra, singers, and ballet"). The article must consistently use one comma style.
I don't believe the section of the MOS about Oxford commas is a GA requirement.
Italicization of non-generic titles of musical works are inconsistent (e.g. "La lugubre gondola", L'isle joyeuse, "Nuages gris", Nuages gris, etc.).
The terms "Gypsy" and "Romani" are inconsistently used. Pick one.
All points apart from the one about Oxford commas have been addressed: diff
Sorry, I thought this was just advisory as it has a . I'm not clear on the problems with the first two of those examples: there's no specific page for the Archbishopric of St Petersburg or the Consistory Court of Zhytomyr, so what are you thinking in terms of changing them?
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
Article has a few tags:
"which may be caused by his father's insistence on practicing with a metronome": This has a "non-primary source needed" tag. How come?
This entire section was a nightmare of primary sources and OR, and unfortunately I don't have access to that source. All the text has been reshuffled to the extent that I don't have confidence in that statement at all so I'm going to remove it.
"works by his former teacher Czerny": Has a "citation needed" tag.
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
Couple of issues:
Shostakovich is name-dropped as having performed Liszt's music. So do a lot of other pianists. Unless his relevancy to that section can be better established, he should be cut.
I've extended the Shosta mention slightly but I'm not entirely sure what you mean - the section is about the legacy of Liszt's compositions, so it's surely relevant that a number of significant composers studied them?
The "Media portrayals" is basically an "In popular culture" list that mostly lacks citations. This needs to be properly cited, then rewritten into more informative prose or simply cut altogether per MOS:POPCULT.
Outstanding work, barring the problems listed above. Giving nominating editor 7 days to respond. Once these problems are fixed, we can move on to citation spot checks. —CurryTime7-24 (talk) 04:07, 2 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Replies to nominating editor:
The Oxford comma is not a requirement, but consistency in style is. Please pick one and stick to it.
OK, so Shostakovich played Liszt's music. That would be notable, perhaps, had he also been a concert pianist his whole life. However, Shostakovich only played other composers' music professionally for about 5 years. He was a composer first and foremost. In that capacity was he lastingly influenced by Liszt at all? Aside from his very earliest works, this is debatable. Looking through the biography by Sofia Khentova, which was written with Shostakovich's involvement and approval, Liszt is only mentioned five times in volume 1 (covering the period 1906–1941). Of these, only two mentions have, at best, an indirect bearing on Shostakovich's life: the first having to do with his rejection by Alexander Siloti, who is referred to as a former pupil of Liszt (p. 85); the other in a passage that states that Shostakovich's music, unlike Liszt and some other composers, was not explicitly programmatic (p. 455–456). The second volume covering the rest of Shostakovich's life does not mention Liszt at all. Vladimir Delson's 1971 monograph on the piano works contains nothing about Liszt, save for a brief passage wherein Shostakovich is listed as the latest of several composers whose piano music was influenced by their performing style (p. 6).
I just did a quick check of Shostakovich's correspondence with Isaak Glikman. Liszt is only mentioned once in a letter from December 8, 1967, wherein he inveighs against Via Crucis for its "sheer hideousness and tedium" (p. 149). A footnote by Glikman states: "Shostakovich naturally understood Liszt's importance in the history of music, but in his maturity he had little enthusiasm for his music" (p. 300). —CurryTime7-24 (talk) 00:23, 4 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you for looking into this so thoroughly. Given your well-grounded objections I've expunged Shostakovich from that section. I've also handled the Oxford commas. Ligaturama (talk) 09:30, 4 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks! I left CurryTime a talk page message a few days ago, they've been less active recently due to personal reasons but indicated they'll be back soon. Ligaturama (talk) 09:57, 11 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you again for your patience. It's been rough here. My wife and I were dealing with a family member who had a life-altering emergency earlier this year and this required some time off from Wikipedia. Just when things stabilized, I learned today that a friend of mine—a kind soul whose devotion to music and the life of the mind were personal models—died over the weekend. Nevertheless, I will be returning to this nomination tomorrow so we can finish it off in the next day or two. Again, you have my sincere gratitude for waiting so kindly. —CurryTime7-24 (talk) 01:48, 2 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Hi, very sorry to hear all that. Also apologies for my own radio silence, I've been busy myself. I should be able to update the below with page numbers this weekend. Ligaturama (talk) 09:47, 12 April 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you for your patience. Time to move on to spot checks! Without further ado, may I please have the quoted text that support the following citations?
30: "Much of Urhan's emotive music which moved beyond the Classical paradigm, such as Elle et moi, La Salvation angélique and Les Regrets, may have helped to develop Liszt's taste and style."
26: "The countess returned to Paris with the children, while Liszt gave six concerts in Vienna, then toured Hungary."
50: "Many witnesses later testified that Liszt's playing raised the mood of audiences to a level of mystical ecstasy." (FYI, this passage should probably be rewritten to something more precise. "Mystical ecstasy" is hard to quantify objectively. Maybe attribute this comment to somebody if possible.)
70: "In 1859 Franz Brendel coined the name "New German School" in his publication Neue Zeitschrift für Musik, to refer to the musicians associated with Liszt while he was in Weimar. The most prominent members other than Liszt were Wagner and Berlioz (although Wagner rejected the label), and the group also included Peter Cornelius, Hans von Bülow and Joachim Raff. The School was a loose confederation of progressive composers, mainly grouped together as a challenge to supposed conservatives such as Mendelssohn and Brahms, and so the term is considered to be of limited use in describing a particular movement or set of unified principles."
76: "she became a recluse, working for the rest of her life on a long work critical of the Catholic Church."
98: "He had been in good health up to that point"
106, 107: "He died during the festival, near midnight on 31 July 1886, at the age of 74—officially as a result of pneumonia, which he had contracted prior to arriving in Bayreuth, although the true cause of death may have been a heart attack."
118: "Chopin's relatives and friends found the timing of this insensitive, and many declined to help with Liszt's enquiries."
123: "The relationship between Liszt and the couple remained frosty. Liszt dedicated his 1854 piano sonata to Robert, who had by that point been committed to a mental institution in Endenich. Clara asked for Liszt's help that year in finding a performance venue in order to earn an income. Liszt arranged an all-Schumann concert with Clara as the star performer, and published an extremely positive review, but Clara did not express any gratitude. In a posthumous edition of Robert's works, Clara changed the dedication of the Fantasie from Liszt to herself. After Liszt's death, she wrote in her diary "He was an eminent keyboard virtuoso but a dangerous example for the young. ... As a composer he was terrible." (A range of two pages is fine for a citation, but three is too much. Please consider splitting this citation.)
52, 134: "At his performing peak Liszt was considered the greatest pianist of his time, and was perhaps one of the greatest who ever lived"
172: "Liszt coined the terms "transcription" and "paraphrase", the former being a faithful reproduction of the source material and the latter a more free reinterpretation."
194: "The morbid focus on loss may be ascribed to Liszt's mental state in his final decade, when he suffered episodes of depression."
231: He was troubled when German newspapers revealed that pedagogue Theodor Kullak had earned more than one million marks from teaching: "As an artist, you do not rake in a million marks without performing some sacrifice on the altar of Art". He wrote an open letter to Kullak's sons, published in the Allgemeine musikalische Zeitung, urging them to create an endowment for needy musicians, as Liszt himself frequently did. (The first citation within this passage of the same source should be cut per WP:REPEATCITE.)
Just a reminder: although the issues brought up in comment 1b are very minor, they still need to be fixed. Please do so when you have a moment. Thank you! —CurryTime7-24 (talk) 18:50, 11 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks, I've put a comment in the box for 1b asking for clarification. Here are the quotations:
30: "Much of Urhan's emotive music which moved beyond the Classical paradigm, such as Elle et moi, La Salvation angélique and Les Regrets, may have helped to develop Liszt's taste and style."
"Urhan was also a composer. No one plays a note of his nowadays; indeed, copies of his music have become collectors' items. Liszt scholars are thereby denied the opportunity of exploring Urhan's musical influence on the younger composer. Urhan's compositions ... bore such fanciful titles as Elle et moi, La Salutation angélique, and Les Regrets. This music was anti-classical, highly subjective; it gave the young Liszt an early taste for musical romanticism."
Walker, Alan (1987). Franz Liszt, The Virtuoso Years p137
26: "The countess returned to Paris with the children, while Liszt gave six concerts in Vienna, then toured Hungary."
Unfortunately I don't have access to this source. Looking at the revision in which it was added shows that the context hasn't changed since it was inserted. I did try to replace it while I was revising the article, but couldn't find anything for it in any of my own sources.
50: "Many witnesses later testified that Liszt's playing raised the mood of audiences to a level of mystical ecstasy." (FYI, this passage should probably be rewritten to something more precise. "Mystical ecstasy" is hard to quantify objectively. Maybe attribute this comment to somebody if possible.)
This wasn't one of mine, turns out it's a close paraphrase of the source so it needs changing anyway. I'll remove the sentence completely, after this review is finished so it doesn't mess up the footnote numbers.
70: "In 1859 Franz Brendel coined the name "New German School" in his publication Neue Zeitschrift für Musik, to refer to the musicians associated with Liszt while he was in Weimar. The most prominent members other than Liszt were Wagner and Berlioz (although Wagner rejected the label), and the group also included Peter Cornelius, Hans von Bülow and Joachim Raff. The School was a loose confederation of progressive composers, mainly grouped together as a challenge to supposed conservatives such as Mendelssohn and Brahms, and so the term is considered to be of limited use in describing a particular movement or set of unified principles."
"New German School ... A term coined in 1859 by K. F. Brendel, editor of the Neue Zeitschrift für Musik, to describe the group of musicians associated with Liszt during his time at Weimar ... and generally attaching themselves to the ideas of Wagner (who did not accept the appellation). They included Peter Cornelius, Hans von Bülow, and Joachim Raff; Berlioz's name is also often included ... The term served largely as a challenge to alleged conservatives such as Mendellssohn and Brahms; but as the composers and their many successors and adherents who came under its description had much more to divide them than to unite them, it ultimately has little meaning."
Latham, Alison, ed. (2002). The Oxford Companion to Music p834
76: "she became a recluse, working for the rest of her life on a long work critical of the Catholic Church."
"[Carolyne] had become an eccentric. Still smarting from the Vatican's volte face she was obsessed with Canon Law. ... She was preparing herself for the task of writing her magnum opus ... The Interior Causes of the External Weaknesses of the Roman Catholic Church. This monumental project was to take twenty-five years to write; Carolyne completed it only a fortnight before she died. ... The book was ... a gigantic rationalization of her differences with the theologians. ... To the end of her days she remained a recluse."
Walker, Alan (1973). The Great Composers: Liszt pp71-72
98: "He had been in good health up to that point"
"His health, until now perfect, was showing signs of strain. In 1881 he had taken a severe fall down the stairs..."
Walker, Alan (1973). The Great Composers: Liszt p94
106, 107: "He died during the festival, near midnight on 31 July 1886, at the age of 74—officially as a result of pneumonia, which he had contracted prior to arriving in Bayreuth, although the true cause of death may have been a heart attack."
106: "By the time he reached Bayreuth in the early hours of July 20 ... he was already suffering from pneumonia"
Schmalhausen, Lina (2002). Walker, Alan (ed.). The Death of Franz Liszt p15
107: "Cosima ... sought a second opinion from Dr Fleischer, a physician from Erlangen University, who diagnosed pneumonia. ... Liszt died at 11.30 pm on Saturday 31 July, according to the death certificate in the Bayreuth archives. From all the anecdotal evidence, death appears to have been caused by heart infarction."
Eckhardt, Maria; Mueller, Rena Charnin; Walker, Alan (2001). "Liszt, Franz [Ferenc]". Grove Music Online. Section 27
118: "Chopin's relatives and friends found the timing of this insensitive, and many declined to help with Liszt's enquiries."
"not even a month after Chopin's funeral, Liszt writes to the deceased composer's sister, Ludwika, requesting information about Chopin, some of which was too personal in nature to suit the surviving sibling ... The latter's distaste for Liszt's poor sense of timing ... prompted her to forward the questionnaire to ... Jane Stirling. ... Liszt was not discouraged by the lack of cooperation from Chopin's family ... had Stirling and Ludwika been more forthcoming with information, such a mistake would not have occurred. ... Ludwika found these questions entirely inappropriate, and considering that Liszt's questions reached her not even a month after Chopin died, she was right. Liszt's timing could not possibly have been worse. ... These are certainly not the type of questions one would want to receive or answer right after burying one's brother."
Hall-Swadley, Janita R.; Liszt, Franz (2011). Hall-Swadley, Janita R. (ed.). The Collected Writings of Franz Liszt. Vol. 1: F. Chopin. pp17-18, 30
123: "The relationship between Liszt and the couple remained frosty. Liszt dedicated his 1854 piano sonata to Robert, who had by that point been committed to a mental institution in Endenich. Clara asked for Liszt's help that year in finding a performance venue in order to earn an income. Liszt arranged an all-Schumann concert with Clara as the star performer, and published an extremely positive review, but Clara did not express any gratitude. In a posthumous edition of Robert's works, Clara changed the dedication of the Fantasie from Liszt to herself. After Liszt's death, she wrote in her diary "He was an eminent keyboard virtuoso but a dangerous example for the young. ... As a composer he was terrible." (A range of two pages is fine for a citation, but three is too much. Please consider splitting this citation.)
Page numbers provided so I can split it up later:
"Spring 1854 (completed in 1853): Liszt's Sonata in B Minor is published, which is dedicated to Robert Schumann. 25 May 1854: Schumanns receive a copy of Liszt's Sonata in B Minor. Schumann was incarcerated at this time in the asylum at Endenich." (p. 26)
"October 1854: Clara Schumann writes to Liszt asking if her [sic] could provide her a stage upon which to perform. Clara needed the performances, as she had Robert's and her children to support on her own. Liszt complied with an all-Schumann concert, in which Clara was the spotlighted performer. No acknowledgement or thanks from Clara." (p. 26)
"1 August 1886: Clara Schumann writes in her diary: "He was an eminent keyboard virtuoso but a dangerous example for the young. ... As a composer he was terrible."" (p. 27)
"the relationship does appear to become strained sometime around the mid-1840s." (p. 27)
"When it was time to republish the Fantasy, Clara struck out Liszt's dedication and substituted her name in its place." (p. 29)
52, 134: "At his performing peak Liszt was considered the greatest pianist of his time, and was perhaps one of the greatest who ever lived"
52: "Was Liszt unique, then? “The word could have been invented to describe Franz Liszt,” maintains Hilmes. “He was possibly the greatest pianist that has ever lived,” Gerstein agrees: “a composer of revolutionary works that exerted pivotal influence on those that followed – also a great teacher, humanist and possibly the nicest of the great musicians.”"
Burton-Hill, Clemency (17 August 2016). "Forget the Beatles – Liszt was music's first 'superstar'"
134: "He was the greatest pianist of his day and most likely the greatest of all time. ... He was probably the greatest sightreader who ever lived."
Esteban, Julio, ed. (1971). Liszt – Technical Exercises (Complete) p4
172: "Liszt coined the terms "transcription" and "paraphrase", the former being a faithful reproduction of the source material and the latter a more free reinterpretation."
"Liszt made many keyboard arrangements. They fall broadly into two categories: paraphrases and transcriptions. These terms were coined by Liszt himself"
Eckhardt, Maria; Mueller, Rena Charnin; Walker, Alan (2001). "Liszt, Franz [Ferenc]". Grove Music Online. Section 10
194: "The morbid focus on loss may be ascribed to Liszt's mental state in his final decade, when he suffered episodes of depression."
N.B. I got the wrong page range for this one, it's 87-88, not 97-98. I'll update it now.
"From around 1876, Liszt was prone to bouts of depression. His personality even from youth seems to have manifested a morose side and a fixation on death ... The deaths of [Daniel and Blandine] brought another phase of deep personal anguish that impacted greatly on his creative life. As he grew older, Liszt was deeply affected by the deaths of certain political figures, artists, and personal acquaintances ... These events, among others, triggered within him impulses resulting in elegiac outpourings"
231: He was troubled when German newspapers revealed that pedagogue Theodor Kullak had earned more than one million marks from teaching: "As an artist, you do not rake in a million marks without performing some sacrifice on the altar of Art". He wrote an open letter to Kullak's sons, published in the Allgemeine musikalische Zeitung, urging them to create an endowment for needy musicians, as Liszt himself frequently did. (The first citation within this passage of the same source should be cut per WP:REPEATCITE.)
"He was troubled when the German newspapers published details of Theodor Kullak’s will, revealing that the great pedagogue had left more than a million marks generated from his lucrative teaching practice. ... ‘As an artist, you do not rake in a million marks without performing some sacrifice on the altar of Art’, Liszt declared to Lina Ramann (E1983, pp.297–8). He wrote a letter to the Allgemeine musikalische Zeitung in which he urged Kullak’s sons to create an endowment for needy musicians (5 September 1885). From anyone else, such an idea would have been presumptuous. But through his personal example, Liszt had earned the right to propose it."
Eckhardt, Maria; Mueller, Rena Charnin; Walker, Alan (2001). "Liszt, Franz [Ferenc]". Grove Music Online. Section 23
I'm now away for a week; if you're unwilling to look at the page numbers in the footnotes yourself then this copy-and-paste exercise will have to wait until I get back. Ligaturama (talk) 09:06, 16 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Some random thoughts on the article:
The lead could do with more specifics on the music. Ideally, we'd have some names of pieces, or at least names of prominent genres he worked in. I don't think the Symphonic poem is enough.
Also the lead, where are the transcriptions? A huge part of his legacy, that definitely warrants mention. Could possibly be tied into the benefactors part: he promoted others music by touring with it, essentially
The lead rather awkwardly skips his first 20 years of life. I think a brief sentence on His instruction by Czerny, Salieri and ideally Paganini's influence would suffice.
Last lead note: a word or two about his many students may be warranted.
In the article in general, I think something else could be said about recitals. It mentions that he is credited as the first to do so—it should be explained that after him they took off, and began a defining part of the average pianist.
I'm not sure if the article talks enough about conducting. He was at the forefront of the beginning of the conducting tradition
I would consider moving the Works section before the pianist section. He's better known as a composer today, and it would make sense for the sections to follow the order of the lead labels: Hungarian composer, virtuoso pianist.
Sheet music!!–We need sheet music!! There are multiple Works subsections with any images, perfect places. At least two I'd think, possibly even three.
I think that the "Years of Pilgrimage" and touring Europe section title would suffice as simply "Touring Europe". The years of pilgrimage are only discussed briefly in one section, and have no direct connection to the Thalberg or Lisztomania sections—having them as subsections implies that they do. Aza24 (talk)17:36, 15 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
All great suggestions, thank you. The first one occurred to me as well, but I didn't follow through on it because I couldn't really determine what prominent pieces to include. Obviously he wrote a tonne of stuff and a lot of it is very famous, but I suspected that trying to highlight a few specific examples would be contentious. My sandbox contains a small list I started of sources that refer to specific pieces as being especially notable, I just didn't get around to doing it properly. Ligaturama (talk) 18:10, 16 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I've been periodically checking in here out of curiosity- it's always exciting to see a composer up at GAN! I noticed that this has sat dormant for some weeks now, and I know CurryTime7-24 mentioned some personal matters that were delaying the reviews' completion, but I just wanted to make sure they were still good to review. If not, I would be happy to help tie any loose ends up. MyCatIsAChonk (talk) (not me) (also not me) (still no) 00:35, 6 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the offer! I left CurryTime a talk page message a few days ago, just waiting for a response. I'll ping you if there's nothing within a week or so, or if CurryTime wants to drop it. Ligaturama (talk) 06:37, 6 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
@MyCatIsAChonk: I haven't heard from CurryTime, so I can only assume that their offline life is understandably taking priority. Are you still willing to take over reviewing responsibilities? I think it's just the spot checks left (see above); unless you see anything egregious, I'd rather not revisit the GA criteria. If you take it over I'll leave it to you to officially reassign it. Ligaturama (talk) 13:37, 10 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Absolutely- here are the only things that I see unfixed:
Ref 26: I found the source here, but I'm confused as to why the sfn has a timestamp as opposed to page number. Also, the Searle source could very well be merged with the Sadie template, and just use the chapter and chapter author parameters. This would leave the sfns intact but just merge the two sources
Ref 50: cut this sentence since I'm not looking at numbers
I looked for ages for the New Grove paper edition, I'm so glad you found it! That solves the mystery of the strange locations, refs like "11:46" were referring to volume 11 and page 46. I've updated it and verified the information referenced, there was one small error. I've also removed that sentence for ref 50. Ligaturama (talk) 17:31, 11 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
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