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In 1886, at age 19 he wanted to become an architect. He was admitted to the University of Wisconsin–Madison as a special student.The reason why I think the special student clause should be on its own is I don't really understand what that means and thus it probably needs explanation (i.e. is it a special-needs admission, a scholarship admission, a legacy admission, etc.).
For that matter, Sullivan showed very little respect for his own employees as well.I'd use
Additionally,as it is simpler English but I'll leave that choice to you.
Although Olgivanna had taken no legal steps to move Wright's remains and against the wishes of other family members, as well as the Wisconsin legislature, in 1985, Wright's remains were removed from his grave by members of the Taliesin Fellowship, cremated, and sent to Scottsdale, where they were later interred in the memorial garden.This sentence has too many commas. I'd recommend dividing it into two sentences and simplifying the phrasing.