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The function of the lede is to define the term and to give an overview of the content of the article. The current lede is long and detailed. I wrote a new version of the lede, which was promptly deleted. The suggested lede is shown below.
The composition of the electronic cigarette aerosol varies with the liquid that is used, the device employed to heat it up (electronic cigarette or vaping device), and parameters that depend on vaping style. The aerosol is a mixture of gas, liquid droplets and particles. Common ingredients of the vaping liquids (glycerol, propanediol, nicotine, other legal drugs and various substance that influence flavor), solids from the vaping device and their reaction products are detected in the aerosol of legal products. Aerosol from illegal products may also contain illicit drugs.
--Theislikerice (talk) 17:08, 5 November 2019 (UTC)
Here are some comments on the first paragraph. It needs serious revisions.
The aerosol is not made by a manufacturer, the device and the liquid are.
That is true for any set of samples, so it does not convey information.
There is some pyrolysis, but also a lot of boiling and evaporation. Otherwise the main ingredients glycerol and propylene glycol would not be detected in the aerosol, but they are.
This is an important correct statement, and maybe should come much earlier.
What aspect of cigarette smoke does it simulate (nicotine delivery, taste sensation, sensation of nicotine in back of throat)? Why is tobacco combustion relevant (source of many carcinogens)?
Depending on device and style, the aerosol is hardly visible (stealth effect) or much more pronounced than cigarette smoke (cloud chasers).
If the connection to passive smoking is omitted, this sentence does not add value.
What are "aroma transporters" and "other substances"? How about just saying what the main ingredients are?
The first sentence already says there is great variation. How about saying the following substances have been detected in some or all aerosols?
How about adding temperature of the coil to the list. If you say battery voltage, you also have to mention coil resistance.
Theislikerice (talk) 17:47, 5 November 2019 (UTC)
The citations were changed. Now both sentences fail verification. Please don't remove the failed verification tag without fixing the problem. QuackGuru (talk) 23:48, 5 November 2019 (UTC)