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Nominator: RoySmith (talk · contribs) 17:45, 2 July 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 05:19, 4 July 2024 (UTC)
I'll have a go at this pleasantly duck-related subject.
in Riverhead, New York,-> please mention Long Island, and make it consistent with the updated Infobox as well.
Riverhead duck farmer-> probably drop the "Riverhead".
as a store-> "as a farm shop" or something of that sort; it wasn't a storehouse for spare equipment. (The article also says "salesroom".)
lights (which glowed red at night)[1] which ...: perhaps "lights, which glowed red at night.[1] These ..."
had the building constructed in 1931- is close to repeating what was said above in 'Description', or sounds slightly contradictory (who designed it then). Suggest you decide if the matter of design, construction, and inspiration belongs in 'Description' or 'History' (or you might merge the two so you don't end up saying everything twice).
on West Main Street (NY 25) in the Upper Mills section of Riverhead.This just comes across as odd, even contradictory. We've been told above it was in Riverhead, New York; I've already mentioned the infobox, which makes it sound like a different place entirely, and now we have a third and different description of its location. I suggest we just remove this altogether, or say simply "on his farm". And see item above, which may help to resolve the tangle. ..... reviewer reads on ... Aha! is this a relocation puzzle? If so, make that clear ("was originally built at address A .... was relocated to address B") because this reader just found the addresses totally confusing. The Infobox may need both locations, too.
In 1937, Maurer moved the building- this needs a word or two of description, as buildings can't easily be picked up (generally they'd fall apart, if nothing else. if you tried and were strong enough). The RiverheadLOCAL item in External links should be used here.
Edward Tufte's ...- begin new paragraph, it's a different sense from duck-in-architecture.
in architecture the term "duck", since it's their term; the two paragraphs need reorganising at least.
As of November 2017, for the past 29 years- I can't parse this. Please reword. Does it mean "Since 1988"?
, and the ceremony is covered by local news.- not of encyclopedic interest, and that might apply to the first half of that sentence too.
OK, I think I've addressed all of these, one way or another. Here's hoping the article quacks you up and that I haven't lain an egg by writing this. RoySmith (talk) 16:24, 4 July 2024 (UTC)
This needs a little rearranging and clarifying, and a few dead links need attention, and then this interesting little article will be ready for GA. Chiswick Chap (talk) 06:23, 4 July 2024 (UTC)