Should have this completed within a couple of days. Given the size of the article I will have to make a full review, which would take a little longer. ☯Jaguar☯20:34, 30 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]
The lead is slightly too long for an article this size and could be cut back a little. On top of this, the lead could definitely be better organised. For example, the second paragraph is only two sentences long and could be merged into another one. The first paragraph needs to talk about his basic information, who is etc, then the second about his history and the third or fourth about his tennis career (so it's chronological). The lead has to be restructured properly before this can meet the GA criteria
Also, the lead has too much WP:JARGON such as too many dates and long names of championships. This definitely needs to contain more of his personal life and a more prose orientated
Per WP:LEADCITE, citations are discouraged from the lead unless it's citing controversial information
I've cut down some of the information in the lead, will add some more personal details once I've expanded the personal life section. I've cut out most of the dates but I've left the names of the championships as I'm not really sure how those could be taken out without removing key information. I've not removed the citations yet but I will once I've checked that it's referenced elsewhere in the article.Username of a generic kind (talk) 17:47, 5 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for trimming the lead, it's looking a lot better now that jargon-y stuff has been removed. A little on his personal life in the opening paragraph would be great, if you can find anything ☯Jaguar☯19:35, 5 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
The Personal life section is a little disorganised. The second paragraph opens when he attended school "Murray later attended Dunblane High School" and later at the age of 15, and the third opens with "Murray was born with a bipartite patella" and his early childhood. It needs to be chronological.
Yes please, I've never seen a '&' in a GA header before, so I've changed it myself. If anyone disagrees they are welcome to change it ☯Jaguar☯18:27, 8 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
"The Scot however managed to up his level of play" - I hear this a lot on the news, it really makes me cringe! It's more encyclopaedic if all instances of "The Scot" were to be changed to Murray
"However, Mayer had to pull out due to injury, giving the Scot a walkover into round three" - again, maybe it's better if it were just "Murray", and by the way, what does walkover mean here?
The infobox image caption, "Murray at the Rogers Cup in 2010", am I right for assuming that he was holding the Rogers Cup? If so it would be great to reword that
Ref 3 works fine for me, goes to this page [1]. If you're still not happy with it then I suppose I could remove it as his height is referenced elsewhere. 154, 158 and 244 were all a case of a minor typo in the URL - they have been fixed. 146 was the only issue so I've replaced that. Username of a generic kind (talk) 17:10, 5 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for fixing them! The toolserver says that they're all fine now, and now this part meets the GA criteria ☯Jaguar☯18:24, 8 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
On hold
The major concern here is the lead section which contains too much jargon and could be better re-organised. Also some referencing problems and a couple of prose questions. However, much of the article's prose does look good other than the first half. I'll put this on hold for the standard seven days but please let me know if you need more time. ☯Jaguar☯16:20, 31 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]
@Jaguar: - I'm surprised the review is this short. I have checked the lead and the first section, and everything does appear to be factually accurate and verifiable (I had no idea he was at school at the time of the Dunblane Massacre but it's all properly sourced not violating WP:BLP), so maybe this has had a lot of group work to be GA in all but name. One thing I would bring up is stability; there is a ((round in circles)) template on the talk page which would be an immediate discussion point, and 51K of prose is on the limits of what's acceptable for a BLP before it starts to become unfocused and possibly require a spinout article, which would be worth bringing up. There's a whole area of unsourced content regarding Wimbledon 2013, which could be cut down and definitely needs to be sourced before this can pass GA. Conversely, Ivan Lendl, who I've read has been a key figure in getting Murray to where is today, is glossed over a bit, and something on his training methods could be included. The Rally for Relief bit is unsourced. Anyway, those are just a few things I spotted, but I dare say there's more. I would say to do this article justice, you probably want something closer to Talk:Alabama (band)/GA1 that I knocked up this evening, although I'll admit that this article is in a much better shape to start with (though that one's not too bad either). Ritchie333(talk)(cont)21:12, 31 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Ritchie333, I realise that the review is looking a little on the short side here and that being said in some cases with my reviews, some are usually triple this length even if they are not in that bad shape. I think that the initial comments I left down carry more magnitude than leaving down a lot of bullet points - but I understand what you mean as I did check the latter half of the article, and must admit that the prose is much better than the first half. The serious concerns at the moment is the disorganisation and glaring MoS issues which could be addressed. With reviews, my primary focus are prose issues (a reader expects an article to be easy to read) and I then check the sources and verifiability later. I didn't find many issues with the sourcing, but with your concern I will leave some more initial comments on anything else I can find. Thanks, ☯Jaguar☯22:28, 31 December 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Respone from nominator
Thanks for taking the time to review the article. I hadn't been on Wikipedia for the past fortnight so have only seen it now. I'll get started on making the changes suggested but will probably need a bit more time. Hopefully should have it done within a week but will need to see how things go.Username of a generic kind (talk) 15:34, 5 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for coming back to this, I was not aware that you was on a break but now you're back I think this GAN can be salvaged. I'll put this on hold for whenever is best for you ☯Jaguar☯19:35, 5 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]
It truly is impressive when an article in its previous form gets transformed into a fully GA-ready article. Thanks to your efforts over the two weeks, this article has definitely improved, the prose now meets 1.a of the criteria (well written) and now all the references are up to a GA standard. It is also broad and well referenced, let alone there are no dead links. Well done on all the work, this now has its well-deserved GA status ☯Jaguar☯17:46, 11 January 2015 (UTC)[reply]