"and also because the New Life Fellowship Trust (NLFT), a non-denominational Christian Church, was alleged by Bajrang Dal to be indulging in forced conversions of Hindus to Christianity" -> I'm not sure "indulged" is the best word here, perhaps "was responsible for" or "was party to".
"Several isolated incidents against Christians were reported from 17 August 2008 onwards" -> Could probably ditch "2008" as the year is already made clear.
"the ruling Bharatiya Janata Party (BJP) government under B. S. Yeddyurappa" -> is there a way to phrase this to concisely mention that this is the Mangalore government and not the wider Indian government?
"Many Christians believe that the attacks were a direct response from right-wing Hindu organisations who were targeting the people of Mangalore and the surrounding area because they had been outspoken about persecution of Christians in Orissa." -> might be worth noting where Orissa is in relation to Karnataka. I see they're about opposite ends of the county, but is there any relation or connection here beyond both being Indian states?
I was a student of St. Aloysius College, Mangalore at the time. During the second-half of 2008, there was a wave of anti-Christian mob attacks in Orissa. Christians were being lynched, murdered, forcibly converted or ethnically cleansed from their homes there. Some women, including a Catholic nun, were gang-raped. The Christians in southern Karnataka were outraged at what was going on, and there were protests against this prior to the attacks. This, of course, was not appreciated by right-wing Hindus. Joyson Prabhu Holla at me!22:13, 9 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I was really just meaning if there was a geographical connection or shared history, which is probably not important now that I think about it. GRAPPLEX02:15, 10 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I don't know the intricate details of what went on, but I do know that Orissa was directly linked to what wnt on in Karnataka. I think the article clarifies this.♦ Dr. Blofeld17:59, 10 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"St. Aloysius College, a Jesuit institution in Mangalore, and some other 2000 Christian schools in Karnataka, went on strike for varying periods between 29 August and the 5 September prior to the attacks, protesting against anti-Christian persecution in Orissa, contrary to the orders of the government who stated that it was to be a regular work day." -> was the whole period meant to be regular working days? The strike period is about a week, rather than one day, so these should be kept in line. If the government mandated the whole time was to be normal working days then this should be plural.
Personally I've always thought it strange to italicize bibles and had never seen that before in writing so I've changed it.♦ Dr. Blofeld18:22, 10 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"monstrance" could probably do with a wikilink; I'm a Catholic and I had no idea what one was...
Quite a few instances of "miscreants", maybe these could be varied a bit more?
I looked to address this but I see a fairly equal use of "vandals" and "individuals" as miscreants and appears to be fine.♦ Dr. Blofeld18:41, 10 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Christian protests
"The protests involved over 2,500 people and among those present were incumbent parish priest Fr. John Barboza, Fr. Valerian Fernandes, Ajekar parish priest Fr. Valerian Fernandes, Attur parish priest Fr. Arthur Pereira, Miyar parish priest Fr. Ronald Miranda, Fr. Paschal Menezes, Parappady parish priest Fr. Alex Aranha, Fr. Michael D'Silva, Hirgan parish priest Fr. Michael Lobo, Kanajar parish priest Fr. Alwyn D'Cunha and many other priests and nuns in the area." -> given that these are all priests, I think we could lose all the "Fr."s to make it flow a little easier, they're already identified as priests in the passage anyway.
"Phelix D’Souza, a resident of Permannur, alleged that the police took him into custody and tortured him and opened a fake case against him, sending him to jail for 11 days." -> "fake" seems to me to imply it was a bluff or a smokescreen, perhaps "and opened a baseless case" or "and opened a case against him on false pretences" would work better.
Crore is a unit of measurement, the same as ten million (so seven crores is 70,000,000). I assume the amount is in rupees, so "₹50 crores" would be best. GRAPPLEX20:07, 10 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I've added this myself. It's a bit strange that the rupee sign seems not be recognised as text and needs a template, hopefully that'll be seen to one of these days. Ah well. GRAPPLEX21:33, 10 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Religious response
The block quote from Joseph Dias contains a few instances where ((sic)) should be added, as there are mistakes in the grammar which are present in the source ("since in believes in Joseph Goebbel's principle" for example).
"Sic" is a notation used to indicate that a mistake has been made by the source being quoted, not by the article—it stops someone fixing the error and creating a misquote by pointing out that the mistake is known but deliberately retained. GRAPPLEX20:07, 10 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"B. K. Somasekhara, head of the one-man commission initiated by Yeddyurappa's BJP-led state government into the attacks" -> If it's a one-man commission, then why is he head?
Well he was given sole responsibility by the government so that would make him the head of the commission. Reworded to led. ♦ Dr. Blofeld18:58, 10 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
"The report, which costed around 3 crores" -> Again, specify currency; also replace "costed" with "cost"
Grand. I'm seeing a few instances of the same citation repeated consecutively but given that this seems to be a controversial topic it's probably wise to retain citations at every turn and not collapse them.
B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
Looks good to me. Always nice to see a wide range of news outlets used for this kind of thing as it gives a broader balance.
The scope seems grand to me. It's very detached from the actual violence itself, which actually seems like a good thing as it doesn't get bogged down in listing exactly what was damaged or who was hurt in every instance.
Because this seems to be a controversial enough issue, I'm going to have another read over it tomorrow just to be sure this one's met; however, nothing has jumped out at me to suggest it hasn't.
I believe I've looked through the vast majority of sources which exist on this. The problem was that the police and indeed the state government were widely criticized in the Indian mainstream media during the attacks. Even the state government initially blamed the police for misconduct, although the official report stated that they conducted themselves appropriately. Where possible I have tried to provide a counterargument that the government strongly denied being implicated and indeed did do several things to improve the situation and some incidents of Christians acting inappropriately, but its difficult to provide a strong counter argument because few if any articles appear to exist which defend the police and they appear to be widely believed to have acted inappropriately in the Indian media. The official investigation into the attacks eventually sparked a protest and mass outrage amongst the Christian community. Its difficult to ignore that! We can only highlights the events and issues which became apparent in the aftermath I guess and are documented in the media. I tried at least to make the article written from a neutral perspective though which fairly covers the issues brought up by it.♦ Dr. Blofeld17:25, 10 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]
I've had another read through it bearing this criterion in mind and I don't see anything wrong with its neutrality. I just wanted to take the time to be certain sure, and I am. GRAPPLEX21:33, 10 March 2012 (UTC)[reply]