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Closed/promoted -- Ian Rose (talk) 11:27, 14 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Nyon Conference

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Nominator(s): Grandiose (me, talk, contribs)


I am nominating this article for A-Class review because it seems a natural progression for the article, which recently underwent a peer review. Hoping to put it to FAC in the future as well. Keen to hear your thoughts. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 07:42, 11 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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OK, I've acted on these things with the exception of the point about whose submarines they were, as this was not the subject of discussion at the conference (perhaps surprisingly). It was not intended to be a conference about particular nations' submarines, but those in general. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 11:32, 13 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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Changed re: the first three things (I'll continue to check for further instances where a semicolon would be more appropriate). I've reordered the sources such that books are by (first) surname and journals, since two have no identifiable author, by date of publication. This happens to also be the order one may have chosen to put them if one were ordering them alphabetically by journal (if you chose "Bulletin, Bulletin, English and International" as the operative words respectively. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 13:22, 14 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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I hope I've managed to sort the latter two points. Could you clarify the first? As far as I understand, the relevant passage is this:
It was decided that French and British fleets patrol the areas of sea west of Malta and attack any suspicious submarines. The division of patrols between the United Kingdom and France would be decided by their governments. They would patrol both the high seas and territorial waters of signatory countries. The possibility of the Tyrrhenian Sea coming under Italian patrols was agreed. In the Eastern Mediterranean, British and French ships would patrol up to the Dardanelles, but not in the Adriatic Sea. In this area, signatory countries would patrol their own territorial waters, and would provide any reasonable assistance to the French and British patrols.
(Formatting removed.) Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 10:01, 19 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

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Just some quick comments. DemonicInfluence (talk) 04:58, 27 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Piracy in this context means acting 'without instruction' from a government (in this case, not making such a thing clear). The Italians simply didn't want to officially be attacking shipping in a foreign relations sense. They did this apparent contradiction - everyone knew they were doing but still denying it officially - on other issues as part of non-intervention in the Spanish Civil War.
The second point is the wording of source. I think it's important to remember that, according to the other sources, the French and British were doing the drafting bit, and everyone else the agreeing - the official discussions - in other words, the British and French had 'camps', the other nations merely representatives. (E.g. 'Proceedings took two forms: discussions between the British and French, and formal situations.').
I'm no maritime law expert but the sources couldn't be clearer. Apparently "The first paper asked that both sides in the war be granted rights to stop ships at sea and verify their flags. Chatfield said that many Republican ships were hoisting the British flag to avoid capture and that as a result, innocent British ships were being attacked by the Nationalists. But in practice, to allow both sides to verify flags would have benefited the Nationalists greatly, and the French strongly opposed the proposal which was dropped." "Verify" probably means comijng aboard and asking some questions or for documentation, so perhaps that explains it wasn't legal ordinarily.
That conclusion is not drawn by the sources used and it would feel a bit synthy; one says there were anti-air clauses, the other that they used aerial methods after. It's possible, although I would agree that it's unlikely, that anti-air actions were effective but the Nationalists and Italy were prepared for losses. I don't know, so I don't feel happy going with it. Thanks, Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 13:34, 27 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Well, I have certified the signatories were the same. Who discussed what exactly is not in any of the sources and I do not consider it of much worth; the British and French continued to the driving fore, and, subject to a few changes, everyone agreed. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 15:38, 28 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Done. Thanks, Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 13:34, 27 August 2011 (UTC)[reply]


Comments. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. Please check the edit summaries. - Dank (push to talk) 00:24, 8 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]

OK, think I've addressed these. I changed "The British arranged a conference on 5 or 6 September" to "The British arranged a conference for 5 or 6 September" since I wanted to remove the ambuity you identified in the original version, even if having two "for"s is not optimal (only two, after all). Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 10:01, 9 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
Even better. - Dank (push to talk) 10:39, 9 September 2011 (UTC)[reply]
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