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I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to see it nominated for FA status one day. However, it's already quite a big article, so if there are any critical issues with the page, I'd like to know about them sooner and incorporate a solution into future editing, rather than discover them later and have to do substantial re-writes. Barring anything truly dramatic, I think the page is fairly representative of the direction it will ultimately take.
Thanks, Prisonermonkeys (talk) 05:57, 30 May 2012 (UTC)
Comments Brave effort to try and get a season article in shape for FA! Always been a difficult type of article, due to the difficulties of trying to get such a wealth of goings-on into a concise form. Given that we're at an early stage of the season, the lead won't really be able to take it's form until the season is complete and the story is known. However at present the record breaking stuff in the lead isn't featured anywhere in the main article.
We jump straight in with the race-by-race report, and it's going to be tough to keep each of these summaries to an acceptable length. Extreme ruthlessness is needed to take every point and say "does this really matter in the context of the season as a whole?". With the exception of one or two races (e.g. Bahrain), I'd suggest that the length per round needs to be no longer than Australia (around 250-300 words). Take Monaco, which at just under 500 words is far too long. Here for example, nearly 50 words are spent covering Schumacher being on pole but not being on pole (significant in terms of the event, but not really significant in terms of the season as a whole) Elsewhere, consider things like was the Pit Fire in Spain significant at all in terms of the season as a whole? Even if it was, would a mention of it rather than a detailed account be more suitable for a season overview?
Only after the race reports do we get introduced to the teams and drivers taking part, first in tabular format and then with the changes explained in prose compared to last year. There's some questions here as to how significant changes in say the Williams technical department are to the season as a whole, but I guess there's nowhere else at present for this information to go, unlike with the race reports. Would spinning out an article along the lines of "Competitors in the 2012 Formula One season" work? Here, team and driver line-ups could be discussed in more detail, not just the changes compared to last season. A brief overview and the major changes could then be summarised in this article, leaving the details and more minor points (third drivers, team structures) to the dedicated article. Just a thought - comments welcome!
The calendar is then introduced with a paragraph, then a table before being followed by bullet points. I'd like to see the prose and the bullet points worked into a couple of paragraphs. The list of rule changes is fairly long - as an example would someone who wants a summary of the 2012 F1 season as a whole, care that helium was banned from airguns? Again I wonder if there's scope to spin these off into a separate "Regulations in 2012 Formula One season" season along with things like in-season technical directives and just summarise major changes in this article? Sections for random stuff that doesn't seem to fit elsewhere tend to be cruft magnets, and are best avoided if at all possible. For example, the FOTA exits could move to the teams section (again, if it is significant enough to be included at all).
Structure-wise, getting the pre-season driver and team changes after the final race of the season has been described is a bit awkward chronologically, and this structure also doesn't help the reader by talking about all these drivers and teams in the races before introducing them. Looking at the most similar FA I could find, the structure was pre-season changes, schedule, roster, game notes, after the season which read much better.
I've focused on more general points rather than specifics, as clearly it's far too early in the season to be making minor tweaks to perfect the article. Happy to discuss/clarify anything I've suggested. AlexJ (talk) 18:35, 9 June 2012 (UTC)