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Nominator: Kung Fu Man (talk · contribs) 06:45, 23 May 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: QuicoleJR (talk · contribs) 15:43, 19 July 2024 (UTC)
I'll take this one. QuicoleJR (talk) 15:43, 19 July 2024 (UTC)
@Kung Fu Man: The article is overall pretty good, but I did notice a few things. The article also passes the spot check. QuicoleJR (talk) 20:54, 19 July 2024 (UTC)
a character from 1997's Street Fighter III and its updates.What does “updates” mean here?
In live action portrayals of the character, she was played by Natascha Hopkins for the web mini-series Street Fighter: Resurrection.I think you should cut everything before the first comma. The sentence just doesn't sound right as-is.
originally having them exposed in her finalized design“Originally” implies it was later changed, while “finalized design” implies it was not changed. This should be fixed.
the character has received mixed reception, with her moveset being praised, but her story and lack of character was criticized.The grammar is incorrect here.
while others served more to appeal to the male gaze.What do you mean by that?
motions related to the sportThis part could be worded better.
and revealing varying degrees of her bodyWhat are “degrees” of a person's body?
and along with her voluptuous body was meant to give her a more pronounced South American look.What does “voluptuous” mean? I might just be dumb here, but there are probably more common words you could use to express this sentiment.
but deciding to be "honest with himself" instead.I have no clue what this is supposed to mean here.
examined her on the grounds of her portrayal of race and feminism,I feel like this sentence would read better if you cut “on the grounds of her”.