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I've done quite a bit of work on improving this article on one of the most influential men in the history of association football. Surprisingly little actually seems to be recorded about him, but I'm hoping there's just enough here to get the article to GA status. Please let me know what more I might need to do...... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 21:14, 16 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- Quick comment
- It looks very good, but I've got one comment regarding the lead. If someone asked me about William McGregor, I would instantly say he founded the Football League. I might be wrong, but I think that's the most important thing about McGregor so I would put it in the first sentence. Peanut4 (talk) 00:44, 17 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- More comments
- To be honest there isn't much more I can add. It looks a good piece, though will obviously need expansion if it's going to go beyond GA status. I'd say it was near GA status already though. However, that said here are a couple of thoughts.
- Do you have any info about his role with the Football League and/or Football Association? I think I do somewhere but I won't be able to get my hands on it for a couple of weeks.
- "who predeceased him by three years." This sounds a bit verbose, I'd simply change it to "who died three years earlier."
- Do you have any more information about his personal life or details of his business? Did he still run the business after 1888? Peanut4 (talk) 23:04, 17 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- To be honest no, there really doesn't appear to be any more info on him in the public domain than what is already in the article. I'm hoping that our resident Villa expert, Woody, might have some sort of club history book with some more in-depth info on McGregor, but he's on holiday at the moment. If you did have anything about his role with the FL/FA that could be added when you can get your hands on it obviously that would be great! Oh, and I'll get rid of the poncey word :-) -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 06:56, 18 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- I've now added a bit more content, based on a book I found in a bookshop which I quite brazenly flipped through and made notes from but didn't buy :-) -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 21:01, 19 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
- Looks good. And what a great idea!! Peanut4 (talk) 14:04, 20 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]