I've listed this article for peer review because I has been significantly contributing this article and now, despite of the start class assignment, I'm stuck of ideas to do, I has expand every sections, remove some un-needed stuff such as list of glitches and differences between different versions. This game from the Rayman series may not have a good impact or else but I just wanted to read your ideas for this article so Thanks, NatwonTSG2 (talk) 8:10, 23 March 2024 (UTC)
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- Aight I'ma rescue this article from the dead. Lesgo! TWOrantulaTM (enter the web) 16:19, 5 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
- Note: I am going to do some copyediting myself. Most of the prose is unreadable: I see contractions and awkward sentences throughout. Not to worry, I'll do my best! TWOrantulaTM (enter the web) 16:20, 5 May 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Lead
- "...in North America as Rayman Arena," (add comma)
- "...Rayman 2: The Great Escape, such as..." (add comma)
- Remove comma between "Windows" and "and"
- A demake, known as Rayman Rush - What's a "demake"?
- "average" -> "mixed"
- does stimulate it genres - Is that supposed to be "simulated"?
- with Nintendo World Report indicates that some have labeled it as a Mario Party-style game. - I wouldn't recommend highlighting one specific reviewer in the lead, as that is undue weight.
- Its demake was criticised for not maintaining the level of quality as the original game. -> "Its remake was criticized for not meeting the original game's quality."
Gameplay
- modes: (colon, not semicolon)
- Link split-screen?
- with variety of twelve obstacles levels on foot where the player have to race around three laps against a CPU opponent, -> "...where the player races a CPU for three laps while avoiding twelve different obstacles."
Reception
- Nintendo World Report writer Michael Cole indicates that every character seems to be getting a multiplayer-oriented title which includes Rayman M which some have labeled it as a Mario Party-style game in the past however, he thinks it isn't the case. - ???
- Each paragraph in the reception section is supposed to summarize critics' aspects on certain facets of the game. One paragraph may be about the game's graphics, while another may be about gameplay.
- Hey so I think this article is probably good right now so I will end this peer review so. NatwonTSG2 (talk) 2:21, 08 May 2024 (UTC)
