Hi! Some comments on your article:
- You should add an infobox; the code is at ((infobox school)) (basically, go to Template:Infobox school#Empty syntax, copy all the code in that box, paste it at the very top of your article, fill in what you know, and delete the fields that you don't know).
- Expand the lede (AKA the introduction; the first section before the table of contents) so it is a summary of the article.
- "External links" go after "Notes". Format the links like this:
[http://www.hancockschools.org Hancock County Schools]
so it shows up like this: Hancock County Schools. Basically, use one bracket ("["), followed by the full url ("http://www.website.com") and then one space, and then the title of the link (" Website name"), and then add the closing bracket ("]").
- More references/sources. You can almost never have enough, and the goal is really to have every non-obvious fact (obvious being "the earth is round", etc.) backed up by an independent source. That means, try to avoid using their own website or anything like that; try to stick with books, news articles, magazines, etc. that are not affiliated with the subject in question but are still reliable (so no Facebook or YouTube). The "History" section has no references at this point.
- Check for
tyops typos: I saw "Membership i awarded" next to the National Honor Society blurb and "incorporated.Weirton" under "History", for example.
- Make sure your tone is neutral. That means, basically, state the plain facts without extra adjectives. For example, I saw "with vital information about", but "vital" is more of an opinion (i.e., what source calls it "vital"?), and "for students passionate about the environment", although I'm sure there is at least one member who isn't really that passionate. Just say "They educate teens throughout the state about the harms of tobacco use" and "The environmental science club participates in city clean-ups", or something like that. It's usually not worth going into too much detail about clubs/activities, and you might want to just make that section into a paragraph, not a list of blurbs (like "Weir High School hosts clubs and student organizations, such as Key Club, National Honor Society ...").
Hope this helped, and if you have any questions about what I wrote above, please don't hesitate to ask! /ƒETCHCOMMS/ 02:45, 4 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Hi! I saw that you asked The Earwig to be your mentor. He is busier than he thought he would be, and so won't be serving as a mentor this term. But I'll step in as your mentor instead, if that's okay. Just let me know if you have any questions or need anything. Cheers--Sage Ross - Online Facilitator, Wikimedia Foundation (talk) 15:12, 5 November 2010 (UTC)[reply]
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hello Wsgstriver (talk) 02:33, 20 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
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