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It's probably simpler if you compare your text to that of the sources you have provided url links for. Remember that a close paraphrase is still a copyright violation. I've seen worse, which is why it's not deleted yet, but it's clear that some sections follow too closely the wording of the source.
If you work on this, note that the article is badly underlinked (which also makes it look as if it was copied). For example, Queens and Yale University have their own articles. Also watch the tone; "many awards" is weasel wording. Give a number, or leave out many. There are similar examples.
Use normal capitalisation for headings, don't repeat refs in External links, give ISBNs for books. The further reading section is irrelevant.
Jimfbleak - talk to me? 07:35, 3 October 2014 (UTC)
Hi Jim! Thanks for getting back to me. I made the revisions you suggested and tried to ensure that the copy does not adhere too closely to any other source - it is all original content. I added in ISBN numbers, wiki links and removed the further reading section and extraneous links as well. Please let me know if there are any further changes I need to make in order to get this approved and I will be happy to do so. Thanks again, Mary. Marybarbour (talk) 18:49, 3 October 2014 (UTC)
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I made some changes
Jimfbleak - talk to me? 06:08, 4 October 2014 (UTC)
Thanks for all the help on this. I made the suggested changes and altered the language to include fewer opinions. I hope this helps. Thank you!
Mary Marybarbour (talk) 18:40, 7 October 2014 (UTC)
You are more than welcome to continue making quality contributions to Wikipedia. Note that because you are a logged-in user, you can create articles yourself, and don't have to post a request. However, you may continue submitting work to Articles for Creation if you prefer.
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Cerebellum (talk) 15:39, 25 November 2014 (UTC)