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Reviewer: Praseodymium-141 (talk · contribs) 08:09, 31 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Seems a bit short and sparse for a GA. I'll review this anyway.

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

Seems a bit short and sparse for a GA. I'll review this anyway.

Criteria list

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  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
    None.
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
    All tagged.
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

Question from CT55555

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@User:Praseodymium-141 is the above draft feedback?, I don't currently understand it. CT55555(talk) 17:23, 31 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

It's a list showing the GA criteria. The circles:
  • = criteria passed.
  • = criteria failed.
  • = criteria on hold (usually for a week).
  • or = criteria not checked.
I will add my comments below when I have time (probably tomorrow). 141Pr {contribs} 19:33, 31 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Ah, that's helpful. Thanks. CT55555(talk) 19:55, 31 May 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

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Let's start with prose issues.

1a:

1b:

A few more will come later. 141Pr {contribs} 18:03, 1 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

All 1a issues addressed. CT55555(talk) 18:10, 1 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
All 1b issues now addressed. There doesn't seem to be much about the history of unionisation, but old newspapers and academic papers did enable some expansion there.
Thanks for the clear and actionable feedback and for the clear way it is presented, it's very helpful. Ping @Praseodymium-141 CT55555(talk) 18:59, 1 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
I just realised that located is used a few times in location and geology, so I changed the first occurrence to situated. 141Pr {contribs} 19:11, 1 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I saw you uploaded a new image. I have cropped its background. 141Pr {contribs} 19:27, 1 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]


Here are some more comments (mainly on referencing):

The reference section seems fine.

Are these sources reliable:

I'll check for WP:OR after these have been checked. 141Pr {contribs} 19:22, 1 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

  • geologyontario.mndm.gov.on.ca - is a Canadian government publication, that publishes what mine owners submit. It has been accepted as a reliable source at Uranium mining in the Bancroft area and I think therefore consensus is yes.
  • northernminer.com is a news site about mining. It has a 100-year track record, and I consider reliable.
  • ontarioabandonedplaces.com relies on user-generated content. Upon reflection, probably unreliable.
  • mindat.org also relies on user-generated content. Probably questionable.
  • opencorporates.com? OpenCorporates won awards for it's transparency work, and I think yes.
  • northernotariobusiness.com - is a trade magazine. I think not good for notability but reliable for verifiability. It has a 30-year track record https://www.northernontariobusiness.com/about-nob/about-us
  • timminstoday.com is a news site, in my assessment, reliable
  • farbergroup.com is a private company. Normally a bad source. But in the context of the notice here https://farbergroup.com/engagements/gsr-mining-corporationaj-perron-gold-corp/ it would be a crime to incorrectly report this, so I think we can rely on it for the specific info it contains
CT55555(talk) 19:35, 1 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comment from Larataguera

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Hi, hope you don't mind me jumping in with a couple of questions! Is there any more information about the facilities? Specifically: what happened to the tailings? Is there a tailings dam? Also, it sounds like there was a mill on site to refine low-grade ores, but is there any further information? Presumably it was a cyanide process? Other ores are mentioned – were these smelted on site? (Tailings and extraction/smelting are generally the most impactful aspects of a mine, so a mining GA should be sure to cover them unless the information just isn't available.) Thanks! Nice article otherwise! Larataguera (talk) 00:00, 2 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I only nominate articles I start for GA once I feel like I've exhausted all information on the topic. However, I did find that I have access to newspaper archives via Wikipedia library after I did this article, so it is possible that this information exists there. I will check soon. I suspect you know this, but for the benefit of others, I will absolutely always put in all environmental information as I can. CT55555(talk) 00:51, 2 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
I figured that the information was missing because it couldn't be found, but I thought I'd make sure. Thanks for being thorough. Larataguera (talk) 01:38, 2 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Kerr Addison Mines (TSE) frequently exceeded effluent standards [for cyanide] without so much as a rap on the knuckles. Later owners fined 50k for discharge of cyanide into Larder Lake. [1] Larataguera (talk) 12:09, 2 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
That's a great find. I've added it in. Thanks! CT55555(talk) 12:33, 2 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

@Larataguera: Any more to add? If not I can close this nomination. 141Pr {contribs} 20:39, 2 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the ping. Here's few more: Kerr-Addison applied for permits to dump tailings in Larder lake in 1938 [2]. Contamination from gold mine tailings has severely impacted the lake. [3] (but maybe that source belongs in Larder Lake – that article doesn't even mention gold mining in the area?). There is an NGO source that says Kerr-Addison dumped their tailings in Larder lake. I wouldn't hold up the review or anything, but something from these sources could better account for what happened to the tailings. Larataguera (talk) 00:37, 3 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for these. I've added them in (not the NGO one). How did you find them? CT55555(talk) 15:09, 3 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
I didn't do anything special to find them really. Just google searches for different terms until something came up. Phrases like Kerr-Addison mine tailings. Once I found the article where Deak was fined $50k, I figured they must have dumped them in the lake, so I searched for things like mine tailings Larder Lake. (Sorry if that's not very helpful! – I think mainly, I knew that there had be tailings somewhere, so I searched for them until I found them.) Larataguera (talk) 18:21, 3 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by Cxbrx

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I may have other comments, but I have other tasks today. All and all, a good article and excellent work by @CT55555! Cxbrx (talk) 15:39, 2 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for these sensible suggestions. I have made the suggested edits. The third one I am still reflecting on and may edit more. CT55555(talk) 15:44, 2 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
I would personally prefer "the mine is located in basalt of the Abitibi gold belt" since the mine workings are inside rock. Volcanoguy 16:45, 2 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks. Should it be "in the basalt"? CT55555(talk) 16:52, 2 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
No. Volcanoguy 17:03, 2 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
@Cxbrx: It's interesting you mentioned me in this GA review because I've actually heard of the Kerr-Addison Mine; I live about 120 km south of it. Volcanoguy 17:49, 2 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
@Volcanoguy: I've seen your edits concerning mines around Temagami and figured that you likely have expertise in geology that I don't have. I have family from the area and now own the family cabin. Many thanks for your input here and your work elsewhere! Cxbrx (talk) 01:29, 3 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Feel free to message me or mention me if I can help with anything. Volcanoguy 03:04, 3 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Note: Shall I move this to the GA review page? 141Pr {contribs} 18:03, 5 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I don't want to tell you what to do. But as a suggestion, you could note on the review page that comments on talk page have been addressed? I consider the feedback here to be inspired by the GA review, but not technically part of it. CT55555(talk) 19:33, 5 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Largest gold mine?

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I can convert the references to use the cite books template sometime soon. I may have other comments later, but all and all the article is looking good! Cxbrx (talk) 15:48, 3 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

On the specific issue of citing the lead, it is very uncommon to cite things in the lead. We always cite things in the rest of it and the lead summarises what is cited elsewhere. So it's normal and as per the Manual of Style to not cite anything in the lead. CT55555(talk) 15:55, 3 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
There is more about that here: MOS:LEADCITE CT55555(talk) 16:01, 3 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"The mine was the largest gold mine in North America" is cited to reference 4, and because it is offline and a bold claim, I quoted the words.
Lawrence Johnstone Burpee (1969) Canadian Geographical Journal - Volumes 78-80, p 14 "Kerr - Addison Gold Mines, at Virginiatown, is the biggest gold producer in Canada , and in North America." CT55555(talk) 15:58, 3 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"one of the largest mines in the Americas" is cited to reference 5
Coulson, Michael. (2012). The History of Mining: The Events, Technology and People Involved in the Industry That Forged the Modern World. United Kingdom: Harriman House. p208 CT55555(talk) 15:59, 3 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Here's the exact quote "...larderlake Larder Lake itself eventually yielded, in the form of the Kerr Addison mine, one of the largest mines in the Americas, let alone Canada..." CT55555(talk) 16:01, 3 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks for the positive feedback, and I support you improving the citations, but I don't think I've cited anything incorrectly. CT55555(talk) 16:04, 3 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Extra source: "Kerr - Addison Gold Mines, at Virginiatown , is the biggest gold producer in Canada , and in North America is only succeeded by Homestake Mine" page 12
Canadian Geographical Journal. (1969). Canada: Royal Canadian Geographical Society.
I think this supports what you are saying, it's about production, rather than area, so I'll edit accordingly. CT55555(talk) 16:51, 3 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
The text in the lead is still not quite right, it says:
"In 1969 the mine was the largest producer of gold in North America and one of the largest in the Americas."
However Burpee (1969) ref. #5 says:
"Virginiatown, is the biggest gold producer in Canada, and North America it is exceeded only by the Homestake Mine"
Burpee states that in 1969 it was the biggest gold producer in Canada, but Homestake was bigger. The lead incorrectly states that the mine was largest in North America. So, the lead should state something like:
"In 1969 the mine was second largest producer of gold in North America."
However, later the article states that not much mining occurred in the late 1960s and cites Smith et al (1993) ref. #10, which states:
"The best single year for Kerr Addison was in 1960, with production of 18,400 kg Au (see Figure 2) from 1,512,860 tonnes of ore milled, making it the top Au mine in North America for that year."
So, it might be better to write:
"In 1960, the mine was the largest producer of gold in North America. In 1969 it was written that overall, the mine produced the second most gold overall in North America, with the Homestake Mine being the leader."
We could drop the second sentence from the the lead. The main thing it to be clear that 1969 was not the biggest year of production.
I feel we disagree about the value of Coulson (2012), ref. #4, I find the claim to be vague and poorly worded because "largest" does not refer to production or area or anything else. Just because something appears in a book does not mean that it is correct. The author's background is in finance, not geology. Goodreads has a single poor review (not that that means much). I'm just not sure of the quality of the ref. I'd prefer it was removed or backed up with a second citation, but am happy to move on.
Later, the article states:
"In 1969, the mine was the most productive gold mine in North America and one of the most productive gold mines in the Americas."
I propose:
"In 1960, the mine was the largest producer of gold in North America. In 1969 it was written that overall, the mine produced the second most gold overall in North America, with the Homestake Mine being the leader."
The key points about my proposed changes are that it is more specific about the dates of production. This mine produced more gold than Homestake in 1960, but not in 1969. The second sentence includes when the claim was made. It could be that since 1969, other mines have outproduced this mine.
If you want to rewrite the above to include the Coulson's claim about being the largest in the Americas, then go for it. I've made my point about Coulson.
I'll try to get around to massaging the citations. Cxbrx (talk) 14:48, 5 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
I find your points compelling and we should work towards consensus. I've made the edits with a slight amendment. Are you supportive of the updated version? CT55555(talk) 14:56, 5 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Looks great! I'm supportive. One mild comment is that in the lead I'm a little worried about when the mine produced the second most gold, but that is cleared up later, so it seems fine. Many thanks for your careful consideration of my comments. Cxbrx (talk) 17:27, 5 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Note: Shall I move this to the GA review? 141Pr {contribs} 18:07, 5 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Same as above, I don't want to tell you what to do. But as a suggestion, you could note on the review page that comments on talk page have been addressed? I consider the feedback here to be inspired by the GA review, but not technically part of it. CT55555(talk) 19:33, 5 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]
My bad here, I'm not at all familiar with the GA process. I did not realize that there was a separate page etc. It could be that my comments should be on the GA page, but I don't create more chaos. If someone feels my comments should be moved or the GA page should be updated then please do so. I do feel that my comments have been addressed. Thanks. Cxbrx (talk) 20:07, 5 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Closing comment

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Note: I will be passing this article as all the comments have been addressed. 141Pr {contribs} 11:45, 6 June 2023 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.