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I will review this from tomorrow onwards! --K. Peake 20:29, 31 August 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Thank you! I think it would be best if only one of us addresses the review comments, to avoid edit conflicts. I'd be happy(er than ever) to do it since I have some time right now, Your Power.--NØ 06:54, 1 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@MaranoFan, thank you! That's good with me. I'm "Away from Me" home right now because I've been going back to classes, so I am extremely strapped for time these weekdays... Untroubled.elias (talk) 07:12, 1 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The ref for writing is not needed in the infobox, when this is already sourced in the body
Only soul should be listed as a genre per the rest being mentioned as elements
Actually, the cited source does indicate emo and pop-punk as explicit genres. I rewrote the corresponding sentence in the article prose accordingly Untroubled.elias (talk) 02:31, 2 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Can't the release lengths be written in track listing to avoid placing refs here? Also, the album version is written out in prose already.
Mention in the first sentence that it is "from her second studio album of the same name (2021)."
"wrote it with its producer," → "co-wrote the song with the sole producer,"
Sorry MaranoFan but I will have to revert your edit that incorporated this. The "co-" prefix is redundant here (listing the other writer/s is enough to tell us she wrote the song with someone else), and naming one person as producer is usually good enough on its own to signal that the song had one producer. Untroubled.elias (talk) 02:32, 2 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I'm sorry but this is exactly the type of thing I wanted not to happen when we worked out the arrangement that I'll address the review comments. I don't appreciate this.--NØ 02:44, 2 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
We did agree to that yes MaranoFan, but some of my reversions were necessary because some of the requests got things about the article information wrong or were detrimental to the article's readability or conciseness. See my comment on the genres for one example. I apologize profusely that I did not clarify this sooner when you first tagged me. To be clear, I'll let you handle most of the responses, but wherever I feel some healthy objection is necessary, I'll be bold and say it outright. I hope we still can keep our heads cool and work towards the common goal of improving the article's quality. Untroubled.elias (talk) 04:46, 2 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
And apologies to the reviewer Kyle Peake for my absentmindedness and the confusions that may arise ^^ Untroubled.elias (talk) 04:47, 2 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Place the release sentence as the third of the lead instead
I placed it as the second - really I don't think it matters where in the first paragraph (or the lead for that matter) we mention its single release, but establishing as soon as possible that it was a single might be good. Untroubled.elias (talk) 02:32, 2 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Writing should come first, as that happened before release obviously. --K. Peake 17:49, 2 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"A soul, emo, and pop-punk song with elements of" → "A soul song with elements of genres including" listing out numerous ones since emo and pop-punk are not lead genres
See above comment about genre parameter in infobox Untroubled.elias (talk) 02:32, 2 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
That is fine with the given context, but still change the below part to "it is about" to avoid using the title twice in a para. --K. Peake 17:49, 2 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Replace the "off her second studio album..." part with "from the album", as the title should have been mentioned in the first sentence
"It was included as one of her best songs to date in online lists." → "The song was listed as one of her best songs to date by multiple publications, including"
Place the awards sentence directly after the above one
""Happier Than Ever" won a" → "The song won a"
Wikilink music video and shouldn't you mention it was the same day as the single release instead?
"Eilish speaks to someone through" → "Eilish performs the song through"
Add in 2021 after The Tonight Show Starring Jimmy Fallon
"performances of "Happier Than Ever" in" → "performances of it in"
"in support of the album." → "in support of Happier Than Ever."
I would prefer that this not be done. Some folks who use screen readers might have a hard time telling if the article is referring to the song or the album when "Happier Than Ever" is mentioned. I'll inevitably be mentioning the album by name, obviously, but I want to make the references as clear as possible. Hence "second studio album, Happier Than Ever" is acceptable to me, but "'Happier Than Ever' provided it with its 'only one moment of greatness', and he lamented that the rest of Happier Than Ever was not as vocally loud and cathartic" is not. Untroubled.elias (talk) 02:32, 2 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"and its radio edit was" → "and the radio edit was"
Note: I had made all of the review changes up to this point but some seem to have been reverted out with this series of edits. Apologies, Kyle Peake.--NØ 02:54, 2 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
MaranoFan It is fine but in this context, only one of you should address these comments I believe. --K. Peake 17:49, 2 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The list of MTV awards is confusing; why is it not mentioned as winning Song of the Year, why is Song of Summer treated like a separate ceremony with the first of two ands in the sentence and why is there not a comma before the usage of and per American English?
Reword the Canadian Hot 100 sentence to first mentioning the chart position, then add making it Eilish's seventh song...
"It peaked at number four in" → "It peaked at number four on the UK Singles Chart in"
Uncapitalize platinum and add BPI in brackets, mentioning it was in the UK and the date of the certification
Generally I disagree with uncapitalizing the certification names since they are award titles and not metals. An attempt to discuss this did not lead to any particular conclusion, however I've capitalized them on all my FAs and that's what I've come to prefer. Also, abbreviations are discouraged unless used again.--NØ 06:04, 3 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"reached number three," → "reached number three on the ARIA Singles Chart," with the pipe
Again, platinum should not be capitalised and add ARIA in brackets while mentioning it was in Australia with the date
"on the New Zealand singles chart, giving Eilish her 12th top-10 there." → "on the New Zealand Singles Chart, giving Eilish her 12th top-10 in New Zealand." with the pipe
Decapitalise platinum and mention the country while adding RMNZ in brackets along with the date
Any specific order for the top 10 of record charts?
Only a peak of number 21 is sourced for Greece
"number 5 in" → "number 5 in both"
There are three countries in this part now so I've refrained from using "both".--NØ 06:04, 3 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
"Eilish accompanied the fictional character" → "Eilish was accompanied by the fictional character"
"and sang it as a" → "and sang the song as a"
Add the release year of "Misery Business"
"On June 24, Eilish headlined for the year's Glastonbury Festival in the United Kingdom," → "On June 24, 2022, Eilish headlined the year's Glastonbury Festival in the UK,"
Add a comma after Taylor Hawkins
"She climbed atop the roof" → "The singer climbed atop the roof"
I've been discouraged from doing this by people citing WP:ELEVAR before, so I've reverted to "Eilish" instead to avoid repetition.--NØ 06:04, 3 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Add "the staff of" or something similar before The New York Times, also remove the wikilink
"and described it as" → "and described the performance as"
The Greece position is sourced as number 21 and should the chart really be identified as international?
I've seen this thread in Wikipedia talk:Record charts that says the songs listed in the linked chart are international songs. Indeed the title of the chart says "Digital Singles Chart (International)". I think it would be fine removing it if the chart covered Greek songs, but there is a separate one for that. Your Power 🐍 💬 "What did I tell you?" 📝 "Don't get complacent..." 06:10, 3 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Ref 118 should cite both the original and archive URLs
This is generated automatically by the certification template so I assume some past discussion determined this was the best way of doing it.--NØ 06:04, 3 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
On hold until all of the issues are fixed; this didn't take too long! --K. Peake 17:49, 2 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I believe everything is addressed now, Kyle Peake. If you find the explanations provided by me and Elias on a few comments satisfactory, I belive we can wrap this up!--NØ 06:04, 3 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
The last comment addressed was the one about the Greece chart. I have made very minor typographical fixes, but they do not get in the way of the implemented suggestions above. Believe we are done here! Feel free to read through the article again if you must, although of course this isn't necessary. Your Power 🐍 💬 "What did I tell you?" 📝 "Don't get complacent..." 06:34, 3 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
MaranoFan This definitely looks better, but you should still mention at least the months + years of the certifications even if specific dates are too much to write continuously. Also, why is and used after Song of the Summer 2021 in the awards then a second time for the list for the same awards show? --K. Peake 08:46, 3 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I've added the months + years in the places you had asked. And regarding the second question, the song was nominated at two separate VMA ceremonies, 2021 and 2022. I think a conjunction makes sense to separate the two ceremonies.--NØ 11:19, 3 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
✓Pass now, top job and I understand why you didn't implement certain changes! --K. Peake 06:38, 4 September 2022 (UTC)[reply]
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