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Hi Leah, this outline looks awesome! I just have a few suggestions:
Global suggestions: Since there is currently no info on this page, it would benefit your article to write up a short "lead" paragraph that describes what type of organism this is, where it can be found, and one or two notable things about it. It may help to talk about sexual dimorphism in songs at the beginning of the vibrational communication section, and describe why they perform different songs in intersexual verses intrasexual interactions. This will give the reader context about the different types of songs and their function early on before their evolutionary consequences for genomes and speciation. Prezygotic behavioral isolation may be better suited up in the vibrational communication section. In fact, it may work well to have one big "Mating and Reproduction" header, and then organize the info under subheaders that reflect the chronological order of mating interactions. This could be Reproductive Cycle and Mating system, Sexual Communication, Fertilization and Oviposition.
Local suggestions: Instead of "Young Behavior", I think "Juvenile Behavior" is a more precise subheading for this page.
Elioeilish (talk) 23:49, 20 February 2024 (UTC)
Hi Phasmatidae,
Summary section notes --
The description of a ‘complex’ was a good addition. Also, telling the readers about their habitat and diet provides good background.
Biology section notes --
Morphology section
Italicize C. plorabunda everytime you use it. What is the coloration of juveniles? Unless it is brown, then make that clear that juveniles are brown. Is there a reason for the yellow-stripe, for mate attraction?
Juvenile Behavior section
This might be a silly question. But do larvae have wings? Females seem to be the ones flying right? However, this reads as though the larvae are the ones that are flying.
Hence, I think making it clear that the females are the ones flying before ovipositing.
Mating and Reproduction section --
Reproductive Cycle section
Remove ‘Mating System’ from the subheading. I really like this section. It is very clear that the photoperiod stimuli is responsible for the reproductive cycle.
How long are C. plorabunda larvae? Pupa? How long does it take for this complex to become adults? Is there a range? You talk about after the reproductive season, but before the season how long until the complex is mature to mate?
Mating System section
This species exhibit polygynandrous? I think polygamy is referring to a male with multiple female partners. Explain what irreversible sperm depletion means. The females lunging or biting males is such an interesting behavior.
Sexual Communication section
“heterosexual duets are monomorphic” -- do you mean intersexual?
Spelling -- Males will engages engage with other males in fast duets that speed up and terminate suddenly
These faster songs have been shown to ensure that sex recognition can take place quickly, as well as to serve as a determinant of mating success. --suggest change to-- Faster songs have been driven by selection, females will preferentially duet and mate with the winners of male-male duetting contests.
The prezygotic behavioral isolation is so cool! Good addition to this section.
At the end, add ‘C. carnea’ complex and the link to the complex, there is a wiki page on them.
Oviposition section
Well written! Maybe it will be better to add before the Mating System section? DGOMEZ14 (talk) 21:09, 17 March 2024 (UTC)
Hello! I enjoyed reading your article. It provides a lot of information about your topic and is well-written. In the juvenile behavior section, why do the obligatory migrations occur? Does the place the larvae emerge from not have enough food or mating opportunities? In the mating system section, is there any reason males mate with more females even though the first two get the best sperm? Your explanation of the substrate-borne vibrations was very informative. One grammatical suggestion I have is in the last part of the sexual communication section:
Compared to other autosomes, these chromosomes such have lower rates of recombination, thus functioning to keep together the loci that are important to song phenotype and preference.
Overall, you have a very good draft with a lot of well-structured content. SiriSngi (talk) 20:45, 18 March 2024 (UTC)
Hi Leah! Your second draft had great wording and clarity when describing complex topics. I liked that you included a hypothesis about migration in the juvenile behavior section to flush that section out. In the reproductive cycle section, it would be helpful to define long-day conditions as you did short-day conditions. It would also be helpful to explain or link “instars” as I did not know what that meant. I was wondering if coloration is connected to individual genetic quality for mate choice in addition to the songs. If so, that could be an idea to expand on. A structural suggestion would be to split some paragraphs up to make it easier to read. For example, The mating system section could be split starting with “females copulate with an average…” The last sentence of that section could be made the second sentence to first describe sexual reproduction and then dive into the details of males and females. The sexual communication section was great!!!! I loved reading it. You did a great job over all and are going to have a great final article! Sgreene11 (talk) 19:36, 15 April 2024 (UTC)