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Reviewer: Vaticidalprophet (talk · contribs) 23:15, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
Picking this up. Vaticidalprophet 23:15, 16 January 2022 (UTC)
This is an excellent article (and an underrated song). I only have a few notes:
author Peter Doggett argues that its structure acts "like a bumper car"Is this an "argues" matter -- that is, is he directly contrasting it with other people's descriptions? That might not be the best verb for it otherwise.
Lodger received mixed reviews from music critics on its original release. Reviews for "Boys Keep Swinging" were also mixed.I get what this is expressing, but there may be a better way to put it. "Also" presents a bit of a juxtaposition and is usually superfluous; the fact the album as a whole and this specific song on it got mixed reviews go fairly hand-in-hand. Proof-of-concept alternative wording: ""Boys Keep Swinging" received mixed reviews, as did Lodger, the album it was on"? (Not necessarily that exactly, it's just a slightly clunky proof-of-concept, but the idea.)
Meanwhile, Bowie's original recording appeared in the soundtrack for 32A (2007) while Harding's version appeared in the soundtrack for St Trinian's 2 – The Legend of Fritton's Gold (2009)) seems a bit misplaced. The paragraph has been discussing cover versions, then suddenly jumps into film appearances. The appearance in 32A might fit better in the first paragraph with the box sets. Not really sure on this, though -- it'd be easier if there were more film appearances so it could take its own paragraph, but I don't know of any more, unfortunately. (The 'meanwhile' is also probably superfluous, even if it remains all one sentence.)
That should be all of it. Putting on hold. Vaticidalprophet 00:42, 17 January 2022 (UTC)