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Reviewer: The Morrison Man (talk · contribs) 21:28, 28 February 2024 (UTC)
I'll be reading through the article and will provide notes within 24 hours. The Morrison Man (talk) 21:28, 28 February 2024 (UTC)
Alright. Having read over the page there are a few major issues I'd like you to address before I can move along with the rest of the review. Most prominently I have some concerns in relation to WP:Readability. The guideline advises to trim an article or split out content when a page reaches more than 9000 words, which Arctodus at its current size clears easily (11145). Looking at the page, this should be solvable by going over some sections again and keeping an eye on overdetailing, in adherance with WP:Summary style. In my opinion there's three sections of the article that could benefit most from cleanup, namely Diet, Paleoecology and Relationships with other bears, all of which I think go above the required amount of detail. I would advise checking the rest of the article aswell. Should you want more input on what could potentially be simplified or removed, let me know.
As for my second point, per Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Layout, I also have some issues with the way the page is structured. The sections on hibernation and diet should arguably be included under paleobiology, and a number of small subheadings like the one for paws could be left out. You've also created a number of new sections (meaning I haven't seen similarly titled ones on articles for extinct animals before), but seeing as they're well-sourced I don't see any issues with those except for aforementioned overdetailing.
To sum it up, I can see that you've put a lot of effort in this article, which should be evident to anyone from the source list alone. However, because the issues I mentioned above do clash with two of the six good article criteria, I was doubting whether or not the page should be failed. But, the article as it stands is a good base layer. If you can sort out these issues I think it can become an article of very high quality, hence my decision not to fail it. If you have any further questions, let me know. More detailed feedback per section will follow after I've seen some progress on the two major issues. The Morrison Man (talk) 23:09, 29 February 2024 (UTC)