The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was not promoted by User:SandyGeorgia 03:05, 13 July 2008 [1].

Trump International Hotel and Tower (Chicago)[edit]

Nominator(s): TonyTheTiger

I'm nominating this article for featured article because it is a very thorough description of an interesting structure. I think the article is intriguing enough to present an opportunity for an interesting building under construction to appear at WP:TFA, should it succeed here. Skyscraper construction is a topic that should get its opportunity at TFA. I am not sure if that would be a first, but it would be interesting. While I am awaiting the completion of WP:PR and WP:GAC for articles at WP:CHIFTD, this is a good candidate.

I note that for a building under construction this is an interesting of before, during, and after (current) photography. Those who are interested in skyscrapers and architecture are likely to be able to glean information from the extensive images included and that is why they are WP:PRESERVEd. The images are laid out to use only 360px of width and the majority of viewers use either 1024 or or 1280 width. Anyone complaining about squeezing should probably just press their full screen button. I see no WP:WIAFA criterion that suggest we should not WP:PRESERVE photographic information. In this regard I would view moving to commons as similar to forking and unnecessary for the reader looking to learn about skyscraper construction.

Issues of stability have been hashed out extensively at WP:GAR and it has been resolved that a slowly evolving article that would not likely miss editorial attention if it were ignored for a few weeks is not a stability criterion violation.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 12:17, 9 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Restart, old nom. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 23:01, 24 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Comments

I'm coming at this with a fresh pairs of eyes - I didn't follow the previous FAC discussion. Hopefully these are useful. I'm mainly looking at prose issues:

These are just examples of prose issues, there are more. I'd suggest another pass at the text. You may want to seek assistance from WP:PRV or at Wikipedia:WikiProject League of Copyeditors/Members. Best, Gwernol 00:13, 25 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

SandyGeorgia (Talk) 01:39, 25 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

  • Sandy, I am not sure I see your point. As this building evolves over the next few years the emphasis will change. There will surely be retrospective architecture reviews two years from now that are not possible now. The article will surely incorporate those. Right now the emphasis is on design, redesign, and construction. I don't think this makes the article any less stable than FA Barack Obama. We have incorporated the reviews as they have come in for the parts of the building that have them. When the overall building has significant critical reviews those will be incorporated. I sort of disagree that the article should be named Construction of Trump International Hotel and Tower. There will surely be significant critical review of this building to incorporate in a building article as opposed to a construction article.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:50, 25 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • Addendum The article already contains a great deal of information that a construction article would not. The article is intended to be a building article with information on features.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 07:05, 25 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • Also, the reason to have a construction article would be related to a WP:SUMMARY argument based on the existence of an even broader article. None exists. The article should be titled based on what people would be searching for. People who will be searching for Trump International Hotel and Tower (Chicago) will find all the information they want about the building here. People searching for Construction of Trump International Hotel and Tower may want a redirect to the proper section of this article, but renaming the article would be against all conventions at WP:NAME.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 07:10, 25 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • I agree with Tony on this issue. It is fairly unusual to have separate "Building" and "Construction of the Building" articles; this was only followed in the case of the World Trade Center due to WP:SUMMARY. The vast majority of building articles have information about construction (see 7 World Trade Center#Construction) and design/architecture in one article named with the title of the building, so I don't see why this should be an exception. Cheers, Rai•me 01:39, 27 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

More later. Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 14:22, 25 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

About the period inside the quotation marks, when part of a partial quote, the period goes outside the quotation, per MoS. Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 15:44, 25 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Well, that's all from me. It's almost there. Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 15:03, 26 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Oppose. The prose is sloppy and below FA standard. There is redundancy and odd, unintelligible phrases throughout the article. Here are a few examples.

GrahamColmTalk 17:32, 28 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

More examples here: [2], and I left some comments on the talk page. GrahamColmTalk 18:21, 29 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
The following two points were copied from the talk page:


(Copied from user talk page) Thanks for your recent editorial contributions. I agree with all of them except I am not so sure the word Twin should be removed since there are so many World Trade Center Towers in addition to the famous tall twins. I will probably readd the word. However, I also noticed you partially reverted another editors changes. You prefer upon to on as do I, but User:GrahamColm changed many upons to on. Since I hope for support from both of you we need to work this out. I am on your side on this issue. I will be working through your comments today and will comment if other issues arise.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 14:16, 1 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

I rearranged the sentence, I think that sentence begins better with 'upon' than 'on' but hopefully this won't be a sticking point. --Golbez (talk) 16:18, 1 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Very strong oppose—(1) requirement for a professional standard of formatting; (2) concerns at content that could easily function as advertising, thus bringing into question WP's NPOV and authority on the Internet; and (3) issues with prose and MOS, although not at all major.

1) You know I link 50% more words than the average editor and we always go back and forth on this. When I link four or five hundred word you will find the 2% that are most marginal and I conceed many of them are. However, I think most of the 50% extra are good links.--
I've pointed out, through examples, why many links are silly and useless. Don't try to game this process. TONY (talk) 10:45, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
See comment below in bold.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 14:29, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 07:07, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

If you want to overlink, none of your articles will be promoted: simple as that. It's a disservice to our readers. Get over this fixation with linking. TONY (talk) 10:45, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
2) It is possible to write a detailed article about a commercial entity without being POV. Rather than point to NPOV because this is a commercial entity, it would make sense to say X, Y, & Z sentences are really disquised advertising. If we can not resolve any such issues you will have a point. However, my details are pretty neutral with equal positive and negative where appropriate, IMO.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 07:07, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
No, they don't come out as "pretty neutral". It's a free advert. TONY (talk) 10:45, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Comment I've been watching the FA candidacy of this article develop over the course of the past couple of weeks. I think most of the suggestions made here have been beastly, but very helpful nevertheless. The article has really come along. I could also see how some say the prose needs to be tweaked, but again, I'm not a grammar expert. But I could not disagree more with the comment that this is a "free advert". Buildings and skyscrapers garner a certain amount of enthusiasm from folks in a city - whether they are completed or not. Buildings are significant to a city's architecture and pride and therefore get a lot of attention. By browsing online forums it becomes evident that there are thousands of individuals monitoring the progress of these new skyscrapers every day. Simply go to Wikipedia:WikiProject Skyscrapers and you can see the amount of time and dedication editors have spent working on articles of skyscrapers proposed, under construction and completed. IMO Tony1's argument stating that this is a free advert would be no different than me saying that having an article on Wikipedia about the Chicago Cubs is a free advert because it helps sell tickets. It is possible to have an article on Wikipedia on a subject which is very commercially active without calling it a "free advert". I can't speak for all skyscraper editors on Wikipedia, but I'm guessing a lot would have a hard time calling this free advertising. Tonythetiger was right; if you can name sentences, sections, and/or paragraphs that are NPOV that would be helpful. But labeling the whole article an advertisement is wrong and completely unhelpful, IMO. Chupper (talk) 13:00, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
3) I will respond to any particular issues. I just hope you will be timely so that I can respond before Sandy has to make a decision.--

TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 07:07, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Are you expecting anything to happen soon? TONY (talk) 10:45, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
In general, when you jump into my discussions during advanced stages. Often this happens at a time when the article is headed toward promote. Then immediately a bunch of reviewere follow along with you and Sandy quickly closes. This is the pattern that has evolved. I am just noting it here.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 14:55, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
You added a link? Why? Are you trying to shit me? They "standing-room-only bar", unlinked. TONY (talk) 10:45, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
"They "standing-room-only bar", unlinked."—Is that a sentence? I don't know what you want. You may note that the term standing room only has a dedicated article and the term is used without hyphens. I added a link because there seems to be some confusion about a word that does not need to be expounded upon in this article.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 14:47, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
No, it's totally ungrammatical. TONY (talk) 10:47, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Ping me when it's all fixed. TONY (talk) 03:45, 3 July 2008 (UTC) TONY (talk) 03:45, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

I couldn't give a dump what is linked in some other article; nor should you: that is totally irrelevant. I'm concerned only with this article. Saying that it's fine to link an item just because it's linked somewhere else is the dumbest argument I've heard in a long time. It's up to you to justify on substantive terms why each link is "signficantly useful to the reader". You're wasting my time—time I could be spending on useful things. I've shown you how the article can be significantly improved; again you treat it like a game called spa-with-the-reviewer. TONY (talk) 10:45, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Oppose at this stage.

That's just from the lead. Prose still needs work, it seems. —Giggy 12:33, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Support - Consideringer the copyediting that's since been done, a quick look through brings up no new issues, and I think the overlinking issue has been resolved. —Giggy 16:23, 12 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]


[Repeated from above, so I can respond here (Tony1)]

Skyscraper: In FAChicago Board of Trade Building, which was WP:TFA two weeks ago skyscraper is linked. GA One Bayfront Plaza links skyscraper. Skyscraper is commonly linked because the average reader does not know the difference between a skyscraper and a high rise. Skyscraper is I belive linked in all of the WP:FL articles at Wikipedia:WikiProject Skyscrapers/Featured Topic Drive. --TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 08:09, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

My problem with your delinking is that you chose to delink so many words that are commonly used in skyscraper articles. In general you object way too late to respond before Sandy has to make a decision in this case, I think we should hash out this edit to get some understanding of our varying perspectives on linking. I invite you to hash out your edit word by word because I reverted it.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 08:09, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Thank you, no: that's your job. You have to justify that every link, according to this statement in MOS:

Make links only where they are relevant to the context: It is not useful and can be very distracting to mark all possible words as hyperlinks. Links should add to the user's experience; they should not detract from it by making the article harder to read. A high density of links can draw attention away from the high-value links that you would like your readers to follow up. Redundant links clutter the page and make future maintenance harder. A link is the equivalent of a footnote in a print medium. Imagine if every second word in an encyclopedia article were followed by "(see: ...)". Hence, links should not be so numerous as to make the article harder to read.

and these statements in the styleguide Wikipedia:Only make links that are relevant to the context:

Redundant links clutter up the page and make future maintenance harder. A link is analogous to a cross-reference in a print medium. Imagine if every second word in an encyclopedia article were followed by "(see:)". The links should not be so numerous as to make the article harder to read.

and

Numerous links in the summary of an article may cause users to jump elsewhere rather than read the whole summary.

and

In general, do not create links to plain English words, including common units of measurement.

Sometimes the density of links is very high in the article. It does no one any service, particularly those who are looking for high-value links to follow. It looks messy and unprofessional. It's harder to read.

I can assure you that for some time now, autoformatting has not been mandatory. The guidelines are in MOSNUM.

As for your belligerent attitude, and your accusations and implications that I've planned the timing of my comments and have premeditated a campaign against your FACs: I'm sorry to disappoint you—it's not the case.

Now that you've used a proper reason to justify your linking of "skyscraper", rather than saying just that some other article uses it, I can see a little possible benefit, although English-speakers are expected to know that the word means a very tall building. If distinguishing it from "highrise" is important to readers' understanding of the topic, I can't quite see it—the word "highrise" appears nowhere in the article. You tell us within two seconds that:

At 92 floors, the Trump International Hotel and Tower is expected to rise to a height of 1,362 feet (415 m) including its spire, with its roof topping out at 1,170 feet (360 m).

So we know its dimensions. Why are you bothering us with bright-blue about the word? The linked article, if our long-suffering readers divert themselves to it, tells us:

Thus, depending on the average height of the rest of the buildings and/ or structures in a city, even a building of 80 meters height (approximately 262 ft) may be considered a skyscraper provided that it clearly stands out above its surrounding built environment and significantly changes the overall skyline of that particular city.

(Pardon the little glitches in the text.)

Then we're told in that article that:

The somewhat arbitrary term skyscraper should not be confused with the slightly less arbitrary term highrise, defined by the Emporis Standards Committee as "...a multi-storey structure with at least 12 floors or 35 meters (115 feet) in height."[2] Some structural engineers define a highrise as any vertical construction for which wind is a more significant load factor than weight. Note that this criterion fits not only high rises but some other tall structures, such as towers.

Right, makes your use of the word "skyscraper" so much easier to understand, and increases my understanding of Trump International Hotel and Tower (Chicago) ... an awful lot.

OK, let's go to your linking of "sushi". This will take quite a few months. TONY (talk) 15:37, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Reply It is not my intent to debate redundant links. I am willing to delink any such links you point out as most are included accidentally. My debate is about first instances of words such as geographic locations and full dates. You continue to ignore the policy guidelines that are relevant. Is there a reason why you are shifting the debate from the relevant policy guidelines I mention above to redundant links which I want help removing.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 16:11, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Comments - Here are some possible writing improvements since I'm not getting involved in any debates over whether this is overlinked or an advert.

Take these comments for what they are worth, as I am not a building expert. Giants2008 (talk) 19:14, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

I'm back for another look.
  • Still in Design history: "which as broadcast antenna do not count toward building height," Make the last word plural? In any case, the punctuation should be fixed.
  • Initial phases: Comma after October 28, 2004 would match the previous sentence.
  • "James McHugh Construction Co is contracted for the concrete work on this job." Has this been completed yet. If so it should be "was contracted".
  • Legal issues: I know I promised to stay out of the link controversy, but linking Ivanka Trump twice in two paragraphs just seems like too much.
  • "Donald Trump and his three adult children were overseeing the construction and standing in the spotlight with their father." Trump is standing in the spotlight with his father too? This could stand to be adjusted.
  • A couple Chicago Tribune links are expiring and two TrumpChicago.com pages apparently redirect to the front page. He's fired. :-)
  • You probably know more about this than me. If they do go behind a pay wall in the future, just remember to switch the link to Newsbank. Giants2008 (talk) 18:47, 6 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • Take a look at our new disambiguation finder for a number of dab links on the page. Giants2008 (talk) 17:44, 4 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • Don't worry about something like scuba diving. Terms like these are fine as they are. If, on the other hand, a person goes to a wrong link, that would have to be fixed. I should have looked harder at the links in question. Giants2008 (talk) 18:47, 6 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

[Repeated comment to juxtapose reply (Tony1]: Reply It is not my intent to debate redundant links. I am willing to delink any such links you point out as most are included accidentally. My debate is about first instances of words such as geographic locations and full dates. You continue to ignore the policy guidelines that are relevant. Is there a reason why you are shifting the debate from the relevant policy guidelines I mention above to redundant links which I want help removing.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 16:11, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

TonyTheTiger, it would be helpful if you were more open-minded to Tony1's comments. After looking at his contribs, it seems as if he is well versed in formatting and style. Tony1, I think we need to remember all of TonyTheTiger's time which he has donated to this and other articles. While he may seem frustrated about your comments, it isn't surprising to me considering the effort he has put into this. And quoting another editor on a talk page and throwing in "(sic)" just doesn't seem to be in good taste :). Chupper (talk) 03:47, 4 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
"He" donates time? So do I, and when I go as far as editing part of an article to show what I'm talking about, it doesn't create a favourable attitude to be reverted summarily by the nominator. Nor will a reviewer typically react well when accused, in a very personal way, of bad faith. Specific futher response to nominator: WP:OVERLINK doesn't "prescribe" a level of linking, and if you are purposely trying to ramp up the level of linking, we'll get nowhere. I could accuse you of ignoring the MOS and guideline texts I've pasted in here; that's what it looks like. So why don't you use your "well-above average IQ" to reduce the link-farm clutter, instead of arguing in circles against my requests to bring this text into line with the norm in WP. It cuts no ice telling us here that you overlink by 50% as a policy.
Waiting for action. TONY (talk) 14:10, 4 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I commend you on your ability to be combative. You have spunk. However, above I have demonstrated the prescribed link density that comes from WP:OVERLINK. I have no more links than that which is endorsed as policy. I again remind you that I reverted you with full explaination of almost every term you needlessly delinked. I think this is the third or fourth time I have reminded you of this. Do you intend to contest the arguments that things like full dates and geographic locations are to be linked as per policy even though you delinked them?--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 00:22, 5 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Criterion 1a—OK, time for a few spot-checks of the prose, and it doesn't scrub up well. The lead alone provides fertile grounds for critiquing.

It's nothing to do with text legibility; you've fixed that. The caption needs to explain more, like ... point to the source or status of the diagram. All you need to say is "architects' floor plan", or something like that. TONY (talk) 03:48, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

No, "the more citations the better" is not at all the case. A balance is required between too few (normally the problem) and the needless cluttering of the text with too many (three at once for a non-contentious statement?), too often. You're right, it is a similar complaint to that about the overlinking, which remains a rankling issue here. You clutter the text with not-very-useful artifacts. Same deal. Now, please don't take the usual belligerent, defensive attitude, and go through the article—especially the lead—weeding out the references that are not strictly required. It's a matter of carefully rationing them, not plastering them everywhere.

Now listen carefully: until we get this overlinking, over-referencing thing right, your FACs are going to be warzones. I'm sure you don't want that. If you took the more cooperative attitude that almost all other nominators take, the thing would be over and done with in no time. But you fight, don't you. You fight the reviewers to the hilt, regarding their advice as some kind of personal attack. I ask you not to bring further nominations here (in what I can only describe as being a premature state) with that attitude. TONY (talk) 03:48, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Criterion 1e (stability)—I see that someone has previously raised the issue of the title, which every visitor would assume refers to a completed building. Then you see that it's a work in progress. The article is thus itself a work in progress, since it will need significant maintenance as the building work evolves. This is inherent instability, and breaches a fundamental criterion.

I am sure you know well by now that stability refers to edit warring. Much like WP:BLPs this article will evolve and require attention, but like BLPs it is very eligible. I am headed to the beach soon, but will look over the above list later. However, it seems that as you have in the past you have managed to wait until very well into discussion to give me feedback to respond to, which of course makes it difficult to address in advance of Sandy's decisions, but you are consistent in this strategy at least.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 17:41, 5 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

And lots more. This is looking like a definite non-promotion at the moment. TONY (talk) 16:37, 5 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Questions: Why are such trivial terms linked: studios (a redirect), Satellite dish, studios (a redirect; 2 instances), Bedrooms (a redirect; 2 instances), health club, spa, Gold Coast, Australia (a redirect), five-star (a redirect), Red wine (a redirect), Wine rack (a redirect),London, Australia, North Africa, India, Decor (a redirect), flying buttresses (a redirect), Course (dining) (a redirect)... I stopped here. Clíodhna (talk) 02:01, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Oppose Sorry, Tony. I hadn't taken a clear position for several weeks, which is probably driving SandyGeorgia nuts, but I've been doing some thinking, and I can't in good conscience support this. The article still has some problems, and even if it reaches FA level sometime soon, it will be going through some major changes when the building is finally finished. Large new sections will have to be written, and if we want to honestly present this article as an example of Wikipedia's best work, those new sections will need to be subjected to the same level of scrutiny the article faces now. It just doesn't make sense to promote the article until the building has been completed. Zagalejo^^^ 05:30, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Comment - Per many comments by User:Tony1 at Wikipedia talk:Manual of Style (dates and numbers) and also WP:CONTEXT, in general dates are not "high value" links and therefore should not be linked. Do you want the date linking reduced or eliminated per Tony? Also, there is a fair amount of overlinking in the article. For example, architect is linked right before Skidmore, Owings and Merrill, an architectural and engineering firm. Is architect in that context a "high value" link? —Mattisse (Talk) 16:13, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

*Sitting on the north side of the Chicago River, it is visible from locations to the east along the river, such as the mouth of Lake Michigan, the Lake Shore Drive Overpass, the Columbus Drive Bridge as well as waterway traffic.
Is waterway traffic a "location"? And is it only visible from locations to the east along the river? Zagalejo^^^ 07:56, 30 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • A little better, but the sentence still suggests it's not visible from locations to the west, which seems wrong. Zagalejo^^^ 18:11, 30 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • OK, although it would be great if you had a source for all that, since again, it's largely a judgment call. Zagalejo^^^ 22:35, 30 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • It is situated at a point along the main branch of the Chicago River where there is a brief change in direction that both gives the illusion that the River leads to the building and gives the building a clear line of view of the Lake Michigan mouth of the river.
Is there a source for this? Zagalejo^^^ 07:56, 30 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Based on the main image is this something likely to be challenged? I will remove it if you really think it is WP:OR.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 14:50, 30 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Well, it's a judgment call. I'd still prefer a source of some sort. The illusion may only work from certain angles. Zagalejo^^^ 18:11, 30 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
It is visible from many places. It is probably visible from Indiana now. It is visible from the north and south along Wabash (see photo towards end of the article).--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 14:53, 30 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
*The passageway leads to views—praised by Pulitzer Prize winning critic Blair Kamin—that showcase the Wrigley Building clock tower and Tribune Tower's flying buttresses; however, Kamin does not compare the views favorably to those of the Hancock Center's Signature Room.
I was just looking at the source, and I don't think it's fair to say he "does not compare the views favorably to those of the Hancock Center's Signature Room". Read what he actually writes. He says that the views are different from the Signature Room's, not worse. (Indeed, he says that Sixteen's vistas "are more intimate" than the "airplane-window panoramas" at the Signature Room, which kind of suggests he prefers Sixteen's views.) Zagalejo^^^ 08:08, 30 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
However, "Sixteen, which has been serving breakfast and dinner since early February, and opens for lunch Monday, is blessed with million-dollar views, though they're not the sort of airplane-window panoramas you get in the Signature Room near the top of the 100-story John Hancock Center." seems to suggest he relishes the panoramas of the Signature Room. I interpret his comment as saying it is less pleasant for lack of an unobstructed panorama, but partly makes up for it with the intimate setting. See the pictures above marked ATTENTION.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 14:58, 30 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I disagree. At least, there's no clear evidence that he prefers the Signature Room. The only thing we can say for sure is that he says the two views are different. Zagalejo^^^ 18:11, 30 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
O.K.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 20:47, 30 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I reworded it a little bit, since I don't think "However" is the correct transition. Zagalejo^^^ 22:35, 30 June 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • There was an issue about topping the building because Smith's 2002 plans involved broadcast antennas (multiple communications dishes).
"There was an issue..." is a bit vague. Did Smith change the design because he wanted to increase the official height? Or did he change the design for aesthetic reasons? Or both? The source isn't clear. Zagalejo^^^ 20:28, 2 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I have no idea what you want me to do since the source is not clear.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 05:51, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Is there another source that could clarify things? Zagalejo^^^ 06:15, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Think about how rare this is on WP to have comprehensive detail on the construction and development of a skyscraper and then think about whether we should expect multiple perspectives. I am not so sure there is more. I will check and see if I can find something in the Chicago Sun-Times, but don't hold your breath.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 07:17, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
A Newsbank search for Trump Hotel in May 2004 reveals nothing that will help in the Sun-Times.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 07:33, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I reworded it, because I don't think you should lead with "There was an issue..." without being clear exactly what the issue was. Zagalejo^^^ 07:25, 4 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
*Floors 3 through 12 will be used for lobbies, retail, and parking.[28] A health club and spa will be on the 14th floor and mezzanine.[28] Hotel condominiums and executive lounges will be on floors 17 through 27M.[28] The tower's residential condominiums will be located from the 29th through 85th floors.[28] Penthouses will make up floors 86 through 89.
I think we should try to combine some of these short sentences. At present, the paragraph is very choppy. Zagalejo^^^ 20:34, 2 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I combined the shorties. You can change further if you like.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:02, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Looks better, although the tense is inconsistent. Is that deliberate, to reflect that certain parts are already open? Zagalejo^^^ 06:15, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Yes. I imagine the retail stores won't want to open until the condominium residents move in. The rest should be obvious.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 07:14, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
OK. Zagalejo^^^ 07:25, 4 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • The foyer is T-shaped, and the passageway to the hotel is lined with floor-to-ceiling architectural bronze wine racks in opposing red and white wine rooms.
What is the function of "architecural" in this sentence? Zagalejo^^^ 20:43, 2 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
It is an adjective that I uses in the same way as the secondary source (Chicago Tribune) which seems to believe that there is a such thing as "architectural bronze." If you know better feel free to change this or request a change.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:06, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Never mind; there is something called "architectural bronze": [4]. Someone should write an article about it. Zagalejo^^^ 06:15, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • One member of the WMAQ-TV Street Team commended it for its signature cocktails and sushi,[47] while another gave kudos for the design and the stainless steel swizzle sticks that they call "stirs".
Who is "they"?
Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:24, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
OK. Zagalejo^^^ 06:28, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • Smith had previously designed the Jin Mao Tower and AT&T Corporate Center,[54] while Skidmore Owings & Merrill had previously designed the Sears Tower and the Hancock Center.
Didn't Skidmore, Owings and Merril have a hand in all of those buildings?
Yes.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:27, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
OK. Zagalejo^^^ 06:39, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • On September 19, 2007, the Trump International Hotel and Tower was featured on an episode of the Discovery Channel series Build It Bigger entitled "High Risk Tower".
Is this really worth mentioning?
In the future the building will likely be used in Hollywood and other forms of pop culture. This is the first mention. Right now it stands out by itself, but when this is in a section with three or four other pop culture references it will seem in place.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:29, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Hmm, OK. It might be better in its own section, although I realize that single-sentence paragraphs are frowned upon. Zagalejo^^^ 06:39, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
It was formerly a single sentence. I think it was User:Raime who suggested the move. It is in the history above somewhere (maybe before the restart). If it O.K. should it have a strikethrough?--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 07:23, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I don't know... I don't really like it where it is. Seems to come out of nowhere. Zagalejo^^^ 07:25, 4 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Well this issue seems inactionable. I have followed the advice of one reviewer and you don't seem to have a better suggestion.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 14:13, 4 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Well, there are three things you can do: 1) Remove it for now, and wait until the "three or four other pop culture references" come into being. 2) Put it in its own section anyway, with an "expand" tag or something. (This would probably kill your chances of a FA, but considering that you'll have to rewrite much of this article anyway once the building is completed, it's something to consider.) 3) Try to come up with some sort of transitional phrase that will pull it into the flow of the paragraph where it currently sits. Zagalejo^^^ 08:24, 5 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Currently the whole article has a template at the top so an expand tag for any section will not be necessary for another year, IMO. Possibly by then other pop culture references will arise. With that template I don't think much action is necessary. People should understand that some new building issues may exist, IMO. Option 3 is probably the best. Any advice would be appreciated in this regard.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 15:07, 5 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
How is the new transition?--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 15:16, 5 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Getting there, but it needs to be reworded. The publicity caused it to be in the media? Doesn't the media itself provide publicity? Zagalejo^^^ 23:18, 5 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
O.K.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 01:10, 6 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Alright. Zagalejo^^^ 01:30, 6 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • Another general comment. When you write "Trump", you should clarify whether you're referring to the person or the organization. (e.g., In April, Trump began the foundation below the Chicago River.) Zagalejo^^^ 21:47, 2 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:19, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
OK, though there might be some other instances of ambiguity. Zagalejo^^^ 06:39, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Do a text search for "Trump", and make sure that in every instance it's clear whether you're talking about the person or the organization. Zagalejo^^^ 18:34, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I think all ambiguity has been resolved.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 22:57, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • Just a general question: are we using serial commas, or not? The article is inconsistent. Zagalejo^^^ 21:09, 2 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I have no preference.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:16, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Well, we should stick to one or the other. I personally like serial commas. Zagalejo^^^ 07:25, 4 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Do you know what is standard policy?--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 14:13, 4 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
See Wikipedia:Manual_of_Style#Serial_commas. Zagalejo^^^ 08:24, 5 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
It seems to me that that guide suggests that you may switch from one form to the other because ambiguity is likely to arise from both. I don't think that part of the guide really supports consistency across the article. I think each sentence has been written and we have resolved most ambiguity issues. I almost feel that if I ran through to achieve consistency, I would probably cause ambiguity. It may be better left alone, IMO.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 14:13, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
It doesn't say that you can just shift back and forth willy-nilly. I think you should try to be consistent. If there's room for ambiguity, recast the sentence to avoid the comma problems. Zagalejo^^^ 18:33, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I gave it a go. I hope I got em all.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 22:50, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • In May 2004, it was revealed that instead of topping the building with communication dishes, which as broadcast antenna do not count toward building height, the building would include an ornamental spire, which according to the Council on Tall Buildings and Urban Habitat count toward building height and raise the height to 1,300 feet (396 m).
This is kind of clunky. Who "revealed" this? Try to avoid the passive voice when possible. Also, I'd mention the Council on Tall Buildings and Urban Habitat earlier in the sentence. Zagalejo^^^ 21:47, 2 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I revised the sentence, but could not think of a way to move the council forward.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 07:07, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Well, try again. Start a new sentence from scratch if you have to. Zagalejo^^^ 18:33, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Do you really like it better now with that at the front?--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 23:05, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
No, not really, but I'll try to rearrange things myself. Zagalejo^^^ 23:30, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I tried to split it into two sentences, although I'm not 100% happy with it. If someone has a better idea, let us know. Zagalejo^^^ 23:50, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
That looks fine.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 03:43, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • I see you've added some new text to the restaurant section. Unfortunately, it's very sloppy. Right now, I'm too tired to list every problem, but hopefully you'll notice some of the obvious errors, and once they're fixed, I'll give you some more advice. Zagalejo^^^ 08:43, 5 July 2008 (UTC) Reply[reply]
I took a stab at it.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 15:07, 5 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I fixed a couple of things you missed. I'm concerned about the tone of some of the statements, though. Take this line: "However, as a restaurant located on the sixteenth floor of a hotel, it offers the chance for even local residents to play tourist for a day." "Play tourist for a day" sounds like something you'd find in an advertisement or a travel guide. It's not encyclopedic language. Zagalejo^^^ 23:18, 5 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
It is the language of the secondary source. Well almost the exact quote is "There's something alluring about playing tourist in your own back yard." I could quote the original source instead.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 01:04, 6 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
After further review, I have reworded.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 01:07, 6 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Well, it would be better if you presented this as someone's opinion, rather than a statement of fact. (Same with this sentence: "The price is respectable given the overall experience." -- It's not an objective fact that the price is respectable; that's someone's opinion.) Zagalejo^^^ 01:30, 6 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
These should pass WP:ATT now.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 04:59, 6 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
OK, although that section could still use some better organization. And I'm not if you're using the word "attribute" correctly in the second-to-last sentence. Zagalejo^^^ 22:15, 6 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I have tried to make it cleaner.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 22:51, 6 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Actually, I was talking about the sentence after the one you changed. There wasn't anything wrong with the first sentence of that paragraph. Zagalejo^^^ 23:08, 6 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I see what you were saying.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 01:20, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
You can revert yout changes to the first sentence, since now it's too wordy. Zagalejo^^^ 18:33, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
The ameliorated verbiage was necessary to resolve an ambiguous pronoun without an unambiguous referent.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 23:16, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Well, it's still wordy. I'll see what I can do with it. Zagalejo^^^ 23:30, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
How's that? Zagalejo^^^ 23:50, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Here is the edit summary from my changes: "There is no one price. There are menus and it is the priceiness which is an issue although I can not find such a word in the dictionary. Thus, we will just go with prices."--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 03:51, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
OK, that's fine. Zagalejo^^^ 04:01, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • As for the last paragraph of "Design history", I don't like how so many sentences follow the "In this year, this happened..." structure. It just makes for an unpleasant read. Zagalejo^^^ 00:10, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • OK, looks a little better. But maybe change the last sentence a little bit. The design itself didn't "settle on" anything. Zagalejo^^^ 23:46, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • (from the lead) The tower will surpass the Hancock Center as the building with the world's highest residence from the ground.
Will it keep that record even after the Chicago Spire is completed? Zagalejo^^^ 00:15, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Actually, the article says later on that the Chicago Spire will break the record. Maybe you should tweak that sentence in the lead.
  • I have tweaked it although I believe I may have a grammatical problem because User:Tony1 earlier said something about the use of the word for in a prior version of the sentence. I think it may be O.K. now though.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 15:31, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • I've reworded it to remove the word "for". What do you think? Zagalejo^^^ 23:46, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • (from "Location") This location borders the Michigan-Wacker Historic District, which is a Registered Historic District.
  • Um, is there any way to avoid saying "historic district" twice? Zagalejo^^^ 00:19, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • (from "Legal issues") With cranes sitting atop approximately eighty floors of completed structure, the Trump International Hotel and Tower was considered the most visible crane in the city.
The tower itself is not a crane. Zagalejo^^^ 00:53, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • The restaurant drew immediate favorable reviews for its cuisine, decor and location upon opening as an elite entertainment venue,[19][43][40] although some consider it more of a place to impress clients and dates than a top–notch dining experience.
I really think you should explain why "some consider it more of a place to impress clients and dates than a top-notch dining experience". I don't understand how it can be one thing, and not the other. How would you impress clients with a sub-par dining experience? Zagalejo^^^ 21:06, 2 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
How is that?--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 06:15, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
A little better, but we never explain what the reviewer felt was wrong with the food. Zagalejo^^^ 06:28, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
At the encyclopedic level what matters is that in the big picture he did not feel the food was top notch. Further detail is not really relevant for an encyclopedia unless there is a broad consensus among multiple reviewers that for example the desert menu is not a strong point, or they rarely seem to have the proper seasonal choices. I think we should leave it general at this early stage of consensus building on the restaurant. When Zagats comes out with 1000 contributor we can say something significant.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 07:22, 3 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Eh, okay... although you don't really maintain the same "big picture" standards throughout the section. From what I can tell, only one writer complains about the zebrawood. There doesn't appear to be consensus among reviewers that the zebrawood is unsightly. Zagalejo^^^ 07:25, 4 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Currently only the Pulitzer Prize winning Chicago Tribune architecture critic has expressed this view. When you think about WP:RS, what do you think qualifies as an RS for Chicago architecture?--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 21:25, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
The issue is not about reliable sources; it's about giving undue weight to a brief comment in one person's review. Zagalejo^^^ 21:28, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I guess my main point is that you go into extreme details about certain aspects of the hotel/restaurant, while saying relatively little about other aspects. You need some clearer criteria for which details to include and which ones to omit. Zagalejo^^^ 23:30, 7 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • With regards to the second-to-last (not second) paragraph in "Restaurant": The paragraph seems to lose focus. First, we talk about the views, but at the end, we're talking about the menu. And then we have that sentence about Guy de Maupassant just plopped in the middle, with no transitions to the surrounding text.
  • (from "Legal issues") In October 2006, controversy erupted over a 10 feet by 4.5 feet (3.0 m × 1.4 m) street kiosk on Michigan Avenue at the foot of the Magnificent Mile in front of the Wrigley Building that advertised for the building a full block away.
  • Can we remove either "at the foot of the Magnificent Mile" or "in front of the Wrigley Buiding"? We just need one or the other to pinpoint the location. This is another sentence that's been bogged down by prepositional phrases. Zagalejo^^^ 00:48, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • Redundancy is a matter of perspective. What percentage of the readers of this building remember that the Wrigley Building is at the foot of the Magnificent Mile?--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 15:07, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • Can you remove Michigan Avenue then, since the Mag Mile is a part of that? Zagalejo^^^ 23:55, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • Think about all the people who will be reading this article who are not from Chicago and have only a basic understanding of its geography. I am trying to give them the best chance to undestand the controversy with pictures and as much geographic location prose as possible. I have reworded in hopes of improving.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 03:54, 9 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • I don't think all those geographic descriptors will mean much to people outside of Chicago. The readers will just be overwhelmed. And even if they really want to know precisely where the kiosk was located, they only need one of those descriptors to pull up a Google map. Let me ask you this: what is it about the nature of that kiosk's location that you are trying to convey through the text? Zagalejo^^^ 04:09, 9 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • (from "Legal issues") At the time of the partial opening, Trump and the hotel had still not come to terms with the hotel workers' union, Local 1 of UNITE HERE, which is the same union he uses for one New York City and three Atlantic City, New Jersey hotels.
  • Well, I don't think it's fair to leave readers hanging. Where did you look? Zagalejo^^^ 23:55, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • You know, it's not entirely clear what happened to Rancic. Is he still involved with the building in any way? Zagalejo^^^ 00:57, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • There has been no public firing or announcement of failed renegotiations. However, he is working for some media concern and I do not think he is associated with the hotel anymore.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 15:09, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • Yeah, I know he has something to do with iVillage, but I'd hope to find something that explicitly says if he has stopped working for Trump. Zagalejo^^^ 23:55, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • The iVillage gig has ended and he is now described as a television personality. The closest thing I can get to a clarification on his relationship with Trump is ex-The Apprentice winner Bill Rancic. Which is fairly ambiguous since it could merely mean he is no longer the reigning Apprentice. It is probably fair to say he no longer works for Trump, but I read all 25 2007-8 Sun-Times articles with his name without getting the answer. I chose the Sun-Times because I percieve it as more gossipy than the Trib and more likely to have our answer. However, if you would like me to scour the Trib also let me know. I don't expect to find much more, but if it is important I will make an attempt.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 04:18, 9 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • (from "Construction") A new chemical process that leverages more fluid liquid concrete facilitates pumping concrete up several hundred feet to the elevating construction site.
  • This is hard to understand. The "more fluid liquid concrete" part is throwing me off. Do you mean more liquid concrete in terms of quantity, or are you saying that the concrete is more fluid than usual? Zagalejo^^^ 01:04, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
  • This is not my area of expertise, but I believe I mean to say that the concrete is more fluid than normal concrete. I do not know how this is measured (maybe viscosity).--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 15:13, 8 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Examples of links I think are unnecessary per WP:CONTEXT: architect, floors, parking garage, hotel, business district, art galleries (misleading since it goes to art museum which is not the same thing), antennas, residential (misleading since it goes to residential area), health club, spa, wine racks, wine rooms, London, Australia, New Orleans, Louisiana, North Africa, India, cuisine, decor, entrees, appetizers, course, interior design, standing room only, cocktails, sushi, swizzle sticks, VIP room, gemstone, diamond, ruby, sapphire, emeralds, health club (second link), Dubai (second link), pool, saunas, architect (second link), hedge fund, divers (goes to disambig page), billboard, union.
Most of these terms are examples of terms explained in responses between 05:26-06:11 July 7 (UTC) above. Note compared to the example at WP:OVERLINK, what you are describing as a sea of blue is approximately the prescribed link density.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 19:30, 9 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Auto formatting of dates serves no purpose since it does not benefit the majority of readers (see WP:MOSNUM) and contributes to your "sea of blue".
Is your issue with auto formatting v. linking without autoformatting or with linking dates. Autoformatting has nothing to do with the latter. If you are against linking full dates, you are I beleive arguing against policy.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 19:39, 9 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Both autoformattting and linking to dates for no good reason are discouraged, especially in an FA article. Read what User:Tony1 says above on this page. —Mattisse (Talk) 20:37, 9 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Either you or I is misunderstanding something. I have debated with Tony1 extensively about linking and I don't recall him presenting any argument that linking dates is bad. There was some argument about partial dates as I recall, but I am linking full dates. Can you point me to a time stamp about autoformatting because this discussion is getting long and I have overlooked any such point above.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 03:33, 10 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
The article seems written like an advertisement and relatively minor things like food, appetizers, sauna, spa and swizzle sticks and newspaper columnist arguments over zebrawood which have nothing to do with the construction, are over emphasized. Relatively little is described about the events during actual construction.
The article has the most extensive description of construction of any of the several hundreds of buildings under construction currently on WP. You can not possibly expect mor detail about construction.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 19:30, 9 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Another example of the over emphasis of minor issues, Trump's Apprentice is over emphasized, since it is never explained exactly what he did other than winning the TV contest and being assigned to supervising the building construction after winning. What was the impact of his role and of the Apprentice on the construction of the building?
How can you call something overemphasized that is mentioned in one sentence in the lead and part of one paragraph in the last subsection of text? I mentioned that he actually did not run the construction, but ended up doing sales and marketing. There is not much more to say and it should answer most questions you ask.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 19:36, 9 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I realize no one will agree with me, but these are my objections. —Mattisse (Talk) 14:58, 9 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Why would you write a series of objections that you realize no one will agree with. You must not even believe them yourself.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 19:32, 9 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I am going by the many supports on the page. I agree with my objections (there are other, similar objections on the page I notice) but I believe often FAC goes by majority rules and not quality. —Mattisse (Talk) 19:44, 9 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
It does not really go by majority rules. It goes by weighted substantive arguments related to WP:WIAFA. If you oppose or support for reasons other than WP:WIAFA it is suppose to be ignored I think. If your arguments related to WIAFA are not substantive, I am not sure if they are suppose to count. For example, if your only argument was that there is insufficient detail on construction, but the article has more detail on construction than any other article on a building under construction it might be perceived as if you are grinding an axe. However, if it is a smaller issue upon which you may be wrong logically, but you have other substantive arguments you might have a highly weighted voice.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 03:33, 10 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Copyediting
Note: please see WP:FAC instructions about avoiding sub-sectioning pages. In this case, I am going to temporarily leave the sub-section with a reminder to remove it later, please. This FAC has now reached 340KB of what looks more like a peer review than a FAC, and since it has already been re-started, I'm short on options for dealing with its length. If there is anything that has been resolved, caps could be used on this FAC, but it doesn't appear that issues are being resolved. SandyGeorgia (Talk) 21:08, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
So you are saying that they both should be linked again under See also? —Mattisse (Talk) 13:07, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
It is common for lists like that to be added to the see also section of every article in the list due to the importance/relevance of the list. This is commonly done without regard to the prose in the text. I am not sure, but I think this is the right thing to do for consistency because when people are reading building articles they jump to the see also section to see if it is on any tallest, National Register of Historic places, or landmark lists without traipsing through the text. I think the reader is use to this.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 13:32, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Comment - I notice that you have had a great many copy editors and you have been open minded and taken the time to satisfy almost all them, even the ones with many objections up there in the beginning. The article has definitely improved accordingly and I admire you for that. And I appreciate your effort to explain your rationale to me. However, on the issue of over linking I cannot agree with you. For example, swizzle sticks are a feature of all bars, even the sleazy ones. Many of the other links are of the same mundane nature and have nothing to do with the construction or the features of a high class hotel. Spas are something people have in their backyards as well as a common feature of motels, hotels and health clubs. Further, it is an MoS rule that links in the article are not duplicated under See also. Our philosophies on this obviously differ. I wish there were more in the article on the engineering and design challenges that such a construction entails. —Mattisse (Talk) 15:23, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

I agree with Matisse regarding swizzle sticks and with TTT regarding spa. The point about See also links is valid, but I'm okay with the 5 links that are there at the moment. The guidance from WP:LAYOUT is "Links already included in the body of the text are generally not repeated in 'See also'; however, whether a link belongs in the 'See also' section is ultimately a matter of editorial judgment and common sense." I trust TTT's argument that many readers interested in skyscrapers like to have a handy list of links to the tallest skyscrapers without having to search the article for those links. - Dan Dank55 (talk)(mistakes) 15:46, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Matisse, I added the spa#International Spa Association definitions section link to spa, because I think readers might want to know what a hotel spa is supposed to be as opposed to other kinds; does this help? - Dan Dank55 (talk)(mistakes) 16:06, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
(ec) Not really. I'm not interested in spas one way or the other. When I read an article on a significant building I am interested in the architecture style and individuality as well as the engineering challenges, not the advertised amenities. I am guessing the height is the most significant aspect of this building going by the emphasis. The article, Chicago Spire, seems more along the lines I like. —Mattisse (Talk) 16:23, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Okay, I think I follow; you're saying just the word "spa" gives the article a promotional as opposed to informative feel, and linking makes it worse? - Dan Dank55 (talk)(mistakes) 16:29, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I think Matisse misses the point with spas. This is not an article about the design of the building, the construction of the building or the amenities of the building. This is an article about the building which requires that all of these be covered in a manner representative of non-promotional secondary sources. The article here clearly needs a section on spas and like you many readers may be confused on what one is. Thus, some sort of link is necessary.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 16:41, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
(ec) The links on spas, even the new one, don't say anything unusual about spas, nor what about the spa in this building that puts it in a different class from the spas found in any of the thousands of world-class hotels. —Mattisse (Talk) 17:00, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
First of all, there are not thousands of world class hotels. Second, we never said this was different. There isn't much about pouring concrete for this building that is different than pouring concrete for other skyscrapers, but we have a whole paragraph dedicated to one day of pouring concrete. The point is that the building has a spa and the term is not one that the average reader will be familiar with. The article should not be written with a five star hotel audience in mind. An FAC is suppose to be written with a potential main page readership in mind not a specialist. The average reader does not know what a spa is. The article here describes things that make this spa unique and in a class with other world class spas.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 17:06, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Well, then why don't you describe and link lobby which usually is architecturally distinct in world-class hotels, for example, and is not so promontional. —Mattisse (Talk) 17:19, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
TTT, I think Matisse nails it here: just having a sentence about the swizzle sticks in the bar is edging towards silliness; linking the swizzle sticks jumps over the edge. - Dan Dank55 (talk)(mistakes) 16:14, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
"Silliness" is such an ambiguous term it is meaningless in this context. The point is do we feel that the majority of international readers know what a swizzle stick is. That, I think, is the only major consideration that matters in determining the propriety its link. I think a minor concern is whether swizzle stick is a major a feature as spa, which it is not. Spa is an important component of the building and takes up two floors of it. Importance is not relevant except in determining whether when one describes the bar one should mention the term. Its importance in this context is marginal, but it is a fairly unique feature of the building. Thus, it belongs in the article. Once in the article we assess whether as a word with its own article readers should be pointed to the article to understand the term or whether readers understand the term without such direction. This is an odd term that the reader probably could use a link to explain.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 16:53, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

←I admit I'm out of my depth here; I would need to read a lot of architecture articles to see what readers generally consider "encyclopedic" and what they don't. I'm just offering a very uninformed opinion that what kind of swizzle sticks they have in the bar doesn't sound encyclopedic. It's not that I think your ideas about linking are wrong; it's that I'd rather we not call special attention to the swizzle sticks, if this is not the kind of thing that shows up in architecture articles, generally. You've written a bunch of FAs and GAs; I'll take your word for it for now, and then go back and read up when I'm finished here. - Dan Dank55 (talk)(mistakes) 17:33, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Somewhere above, I think you questioned whether Smith as the architect of the building would remain associated with the building for a long time. He will. Architects remain associated with buildings almost forever. An apprentice might not.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 18:19, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

We talk about Adrian Smith, the architect, in the lead, and then there's a single mention 2 sections down that isn't about him, and then we talk about him again 2 sections later. I was asking if we should refer to Smith as "Smith" in that isolated mention or as "the architect". I think that "Smith" will force a lot of readers to hunt around for who "Smith" is, if they forgot or if they jumped around, so I prefer "The architect" for the isolated mention. - Dan Dank55 (talk)(mistakes) 19:37, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
How about, "Architect Adrian Smith's 2002 plans..."? Or is that too wordy? Zagalejo^^^ 19:41, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I'd prefer that to what we've got now, which is "Smith's 2002 plans..." - Dan Dank55 (talk)(mistakes) 19:43, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I think the recent changes are fine. I don't think Adrian Smith should be piped with architect. That seems unorthodox.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 21:54, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Also, it is already a top site on Google, and I am concerned, with Tony, that it is just more P.R. for the building. —Mattisse (Talk) 22:19, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I think that's a very valid concern. My take is that 80% or 90% of the stories we see in daily newspapers started life as a press release, so the question is, is this article more a reflection of those press releases, or are these the things that people in general want to know about the building? My answer is that people are largely silly (there's that word again :)...the main draw of modern skyscrapers is the "aura of opulence", so I'm not just being the tool of Donald Trump (nor just a tool) when I leave some of the fluffier stuff in the article. Bars and spas really are things that people want to know about; that's why TV shows, magazines and newspapers talk about them.
I will be finished with my (largely cosmetic) edits within 2 hours. The article has gotten a lot of work that we haven't talked about on this page (I didn't want this page to turn into a novel). I hope everyone will either read the article or look at a diff covering the last few days when I'm through, and give it a second chance. Tony1 is snowed under with work at the moment so we probably won't hear from him. - Dan Dank55 (talk)(mistakes) 22:46, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Well, you do have a silly article for silly people, as you refer to above. I am actually interested in architecture and buildings, not spas, swizzle sticks, or the Trump family, so this article just too fluffy for me. (I think you are wrong about the silliness of people. If people really were interested in spas, for example, the spa article would be a whole lot more interesting than it is. There are a lot of very good articles on buildings, even tall ones. You underestimate people interested in buildings who want serious content rather than gossip column fare. There are interesting issues around constructing such buildings that are not addressed here. ) —Mattisse (Talk) 23:36, 11 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I've actually only gotten halfway through with my copyedit; I've just been told that the tone gets worse, so I may agree with you by the time I finish. I've told TTT I will do a thorough copyedit first, and then I'm going to make some suggestions on the tone. - Dan Dank55 (talk)(mistakes) 00:29, 12 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
I've been looking at tall building articles, and none of them has a section called "Features" and none of them considers "Architecture" to be the presence of parking garages, spas and health clubs with no mention of architectural style. They are not particularly good articles, but they are sensible compared to this one. Even the articles on the tallest buildings in the world do not get into the fluffy trivia this one does. None of them even mentions restaurants, never mind swivel sticks. By the way, divers still goes to a disambig page which indicates to me that it should not be linked. —Mattisse (Talk) 01:00, 12 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

←I've gotten a little farther, and my feeling is that some of the stuff in the restaurant section, for instance, has to go ("elite", "status", and especially, "Trump")...but my feeling is that when you delete the stuff that sounds a bit like a press release, what you're left with is a subsection about a very notable restaurant, praised by food critics. The article goes on a bit about the interior decor...but the sources support the idea that the decor is notable all by itself. Can't this be an article that's about decor, in part? As for parking garages...I think I might be with you there, I'm not there yet :) - Dan Dank55 (talk)(mistakes) 01:41, 12 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

The Ritz-Carlton Millenia Singapore mentions a number of facilities, including its spa. Wikipedia actually doesn't have a lot of articles about 4-star hotels (that I could find), which surprises me. - Dan Dank55 (talk)(mistakes) 02:03, 12 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
If you read the article on 5-star hotels, you see that it is a low level article, not very important, especially now that there are six and seven star claims. None of the other building articles that I found have anything to with decor. The closest is the Flatiron Building which mentions some of the offices are strangely shaped because of the building structure. Does the article have to have all that stuff about Trump's family? —Mattisse (Talk) 02:08, 12 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
The Ritz-Carlton Millenia Singapore is hardly a model article. —Mattisse (Talk) 02:11, 12 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
(Trump's family? Ick!) On the subject of decor: if the sources establish that the decor is notable by itself, why can't this be an article about a notable skyscraper housing a notable hotel with a notable restaurant and notable decor? Are you saying that this stuff would be more encyclopedic if we broke it up into 3 or 4 articles, or are you saying that the sources don't establish notability for these things? - Dan Dank55 (talk)(mistakes) 02:35, 12 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
You'll be happy to know the entire bar, swizzle sticks and all, just got dumped in the river. I don't think the sources established that it was even interesting. - Dan Dank55 (talk)(mistakes) 02:54, 12 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
It is helpful to look at articles of older buildings. Then you see that such things are transient in a building. I would venture to say the "interior decor" is PR stuff and not fundamental to a building that is going to last decades, if not longer. Plus, I do not understand the primary editor's defense of low value, if not crappy, links that explain nothing. Glad to see that the worthlessness of swizzle sticks is finally being recognized. —Mattisse (Talk) 03:02, 12 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
(ec) And the spa is going in right behind it. There is a suggestion of a connection to possibly notable spas, but no support for that in the sources. - Dan Dank55 (talk)(mistakes) 03:03, 12 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

←I've tossed a fair number of links; I think I can defend the ones I left, although I'm still arguing about United States etc. For the decor: although I need to double-check to make sure, but I believe it was designed by a world-class architect and there are multiple notable architects commenting on notability in the sources. - Dan Dank55 (talk)(mistakes) 03:07, 12 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

Okay, done. I've left a few notes for TTT, and I need to re-read this tomorrow afternoon when I'm actually awake, but I believe everyone's concerns have been largely dealt with. There are a few links that TTT and I need to talk about, but I did pull a lot of the links. Everything that anyone feared might be promotional, fluffy, or undersourced is gone, except for material on the hotel, restaurant and decor; the material I decided to keep was, I think, not only relevant, but even notable in its own right, according to the sources. I actually really like the article now, but maybe that's just me talking through a soporific haze. Night-night. - Dan Dank55 (talk)(mistakes) 05:40, 12 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Continue to oppose - Citysearch, Time Out, and RedEye are tabloids that seamlessly intermix advertising with entertainment tips; Chicago Magazine is at best along the lines of People Magazine. Donald Trump lives in New York and The New York Times covers him in a gossipy way as they do all celebrities so the fact he is mentioned there means nothing. The section on Rancic and the Trumps draws a conclusion without really saying it and without giving a source that draws the conclusion directly. There is no real info on Rancic to support it. It seems like an excuse to have a gratuitious paragraph about Trump family dynamics. Also, I question the organization of the article. Why are we hit with paragraphs and paragraphs of "Features" before "Development" (including "Construction" and other relevant sections). I think there are still many silly links. For example, I don't see why any show business person who may have had a facial from the company that had the franchise for facials sometime before this article was written should have their own link: "The spa has also partnered with Kate Somerville, a Los Angeles skin care specialist with clients such as Jessica Alba, Kate Beckinsale, Debra Messing, and Nicole Richie." —Mattisse (Talk) 15:48, 12 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
If people feel Development should be before features I have no problem with that. It is fairly common practice in WP to link the names of notable persons included in an article. I do not understand the complaint. Until Somerville gets her own article this listing is necessary, IMO. Like I said above the sources for the bar are not the best. However, they are WP:RS on critical review of the subject for which they are used. For certain topics, people magazine is a RS. You are generalizing saying that they are tabloids. Consider the claims that we are attempting to attribute. Are these sources RS for these claims?--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 16:13, 12 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
More examples: "It offers gemstone-infused (diamond, ruby, or sapphire) oil massages, a "robe menu", and, for customers who come sufficiently early, hydrating masques, exfoliating salts and the "Deluge shower"." What are these things? What are gemstone-infused (diamond, ruby, or sapphire) oil massages - massage oils with lumps of gemstones it them? I am guessing a "robe menu" is really just a choice of robes. Why must one come early for a hydrating masque (a product easily available in stores) and exfoliating salts (bought in any drug store and used commonly in the shower)? They are not exactly unusual items (minus the fancy names) in beauty salons and spas. The "Deluge shower" sounds like a shower with plenty of water. —Mattisse (Talk) 17:32, 12 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
More examples of what. Please point to WP:WIAFA so I can understand what you are saying.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM) 18:59, 12 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]
Examples of trivial, public relations material that is a meaningless use of PR words (conveying nothing realistic), and not only that, they are wikilinked for no reason, IMO. Good examples of what I object to in the article. —Mattisse (Talk) 22:03, 12 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

As requested, I've returned for another look.

A couple of general thoughts before I go: I have to agree with the majority of reviewers about the linking. I could go either way on the dates, but linking some of the words already mentioned is a little too much for my taste. Also, the Spa section raises a couple questions for me. First, are there any negative reviews for it? If one is avaliable, including it would go a long way toward resolving the POV concerns above. More importantly, how is a massage gemstone-infused? Are they in the oil? With this all-important question, I declare myself Neutral and wish you the best. Giants2008 (17-14) 02:25, 13 July 2008 (UTC)Reply[reply]

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