GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 22:26, 19 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]


Criteria

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GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

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  • Do you think citations are necessary here? I didn't include them because there are five in the footnote, which covers the exact same ground (just in more detail)—figured we could avoid repeating some references. But if you think they're needed, I'll add one for November and one for December.

Discussion

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Prose Suggestions

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Please note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.

Lede

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  • In the second phrasing it's not clear whether the family was a pioneering family that happened to be in Austin at the time, or whether they were Austin pioneers.
  • Maybe not strictly necessary, but they're pretty interesting articles.
  • Done.
  • Done.

Early life and education

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  • I get your point, although I think it fits a bit better here, and have trimmed a bit of the family information. I prefer the header "Early life and education," which I use almost universally in biographies.

Education

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  • It's a minor point, although I think this information (along with the post-law school trip) gives a slight sense of Brady's means and worldview.
  • Done.

Law

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District attorney

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  • Done.

County judge

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  • Changed to "moved its offices to," although I haven't been able to find where they were beforehand.
  • Done.
  • Done.

Oil

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  • Preferences vary, but I try to keep section headers short, e.g., "Law," "Oil," and "Politics."

Later years

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  • I see where you're coming from, although later years is a subsection of "Career," so I don't think it makes sense to deal with the deaths here.

Social life

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  • Done.

Personal life

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  • Changed.
  • Already addressed by you.
  • The source says that "Mr. and Mrs. W. P. Brady, recently of Pecos, Texas, have taken a home on Fort Boulevard." I suspect that they rented, given that he bought land and had a house built shortly thereafter.

Notes

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  • There's a reason these aren't in the main text, but I do think they serve a purpose. They give a sense of the cases Brady presided over at the time, and, by extension, the types of crimes that were prosecuted at the time—all those liquor and prostitution cases, for example. And then who wouldn't want to hear about O. H. Strahl, who was sent to jail for "calling the president vile names" and wishing for American troops to be "blown to hell when they landed in France"?